Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The charts demonstrate the variation in using electrical equipments alondside the time spent in one country to do housework in households from 1920 to 2019.

Overall, It is clear that some electrical machine witnessed a rose in the percentage of households while others dealed with decline.

In 1920 the washing machine domanied the usage precentage with 40% , vacuum cleaner is al little behinde acheiving 30% and the refrigerator recorded the lowest rate nearly 2%,but this dissipontment rate didnot last for long.

As for the next 40 yesrs the vacuum cleaner faced a sharp increasment of about 90% ,meanwhile the vacuum cleaner came in the second place with illustration of 40% and the washing machine usage held the third place with 30% increasment .

Between 1960 and 1980 was a blooming decades for the refrigerator as it reached 100% of percentage of households ,also were a significant years for the vaccum cleaner that had a rose of 20 % reaching 90% usage .

However, in those twenty years It wasnot the same achveiment for the washing machine as it had a fallen rate of 10% which made her far about 40% below the refrigerator usage .

fortuntally , by 2000 the washing machine usage strarted to increas again and overcome the drop of 10% and continued increasing till 2019.

On the other hand, in the same year the vaccum cleaner usage come nick to nick with the usage of the refrigerator and both of them have resumed this glory for the following 19 years .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response addresses the task only minimally. While the student attempts to describe the main trends across the charts, the information is presented with significant inaccuracies and confusion regarding the data. For example, the student writes that 'the vacuum cleaner faced a sharp increasment of about 90%', which misinterprets the graph where the percentage reached 90% rather than increasing by that amount. Furthermore, key data points are misread or confused between categories, such as attributing the 40% figure incorrectly in the second paragraph. There is no mention of the housework hours chart at all in the body paragraphs, leaving a major part of the visual data completely unaddressed. To reach a higher level, the response needs to accurately report the figures shown in all parts of the visual prompt and ensure that key trends are clearly supported with correct data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response exhibits some organisation with an introduction and multiple body paragraphs, but there is no clear overall progression of information. The logical flow is hindered by inaccurate data reporting and confusing transitions. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is often disjointed, jumping between different time periods and appliances without a clear narrative arc. Cohesive devices are used, but they are frequently repetitive or mechanically applied, such as 'As for the next 40 years' and 'On the other hand'. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, as seen in the phrase 'made her far about 40% below'. To improve, the student needs to group information logically—such as by appliance or time period—and ensure that cohesive devices are used to build a natural, clear progression of ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The student attempts to use some less common vocabulary items, such as 'domanied', 'dissipontment', and 'increasment', but these reveal frequent errors in word formation and spelling. There are also notable issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'dealed with decline' instead of 'experienced a decline', and 'come nick to nick' instead of 'neck and neck'. While the reader can generally understand the intended meaning despite these slips, the vocabulary control is weak. To achieve a higher band, the student must expand their vocabulary control, ensure correct word forms and derivations, and learn accurate collocations for describing statistical trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences with frequent attempts at complex forms that turn out faulty. There are persistent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and articles throughout the text, such as 'It is clear that some electrical machine' (plural agreement error) and 'Between 1960 and 1980 was a blooming decades' (copula and plural mismatch). Punctuation is also problematic, with erratic spacing around commas and full stops. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the grammar from being considered reliable. To progress, the student needs to focus on basic sentence construction accuracy, ensuring subject-verb agreement, correct preposition use, and consistent control of past tense forms when describing historical data.

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