Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The chart illustrates 1920 to 2019 in one country the change in electrical appliances and how many amount of time spent doimg housework in households.
Overall, here are we have two stages in one country which shows how many consume electrical appliances in household and in housework.
In 1920 to 2019, this country percentage of households with electrical appliances. In 1920, washing machine consume starting in 40 percentage to 70 % till and between in some changing like increasing this persantage.And Refigerator in 1920 was 0% and then it rapidly change and increase and stopped in 1980 on 100%.And Vacuum cleaner in 1920 was 30% and then it increase and stopped in 1960 and then down slightly and then stopped in 2019 60%.
Electrical appliances of sendind time which including like washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning number of hours of housework in per week per household in 1920 to 2019. It strart from 50% and then it dropped in 1960 20% and then it countinue and up to down in 1980 to 2019.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response addresses the task only partially, presenting a very limited and confused summary of the charts. While the student attempts to report some data points, such as the 1920 washing machine figure at 40% and the refrigerator reaching 100%, key trends are poorly communicated and lack clarity. The overview provided in the second paragraph is extremely confused and fails to accurately capture the main overall developments, such as the general increase in appliance ownership alongside a substantial drop in weekly housework hours. Ideas remain underdeveloped and information is often inaccurate or misinterpreted from the visual data, restricting the quality of the overall response.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response lacks a clear overall progression and logical organisation. Information and ideas are not arranged coherently, making it difficult for the reader to follow the trends across the century. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak, consisting of fragmented sentences and disjointed observations rather than well-sequenced comparisons. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with repetitive transitional phrases like 'and then' dominating the text and creating a mechanical and disjointed flow throughout the writing.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily reliant on language lifted directly from the prompt. The student makes frequent word choice and word formation errors, such as 'consume electrical appliances', 'Refigerator', and 'sendind time', which strain the reader's understanding. There is a lack of control over appropriate terminology for describing data trends, resulting in awkward phrases like 'down slightly and then stopped in 2019 60%'. The range of vocabulary is severely limited and inadequate for a precise discussion of statistical charts.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical range is very limited, relying primarily on simple and faulty sentence forms. There are frequent, persistent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, prepositions, and sentence structures, such as 'how many amount of time spent doimg housework' and 'It strart from 50% and then it dropped in 1960 20%'. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are consistently grammatically flawed. These errors frequently impede communication and cause significant difficulty for the reader in discerning the intended meaning of the sentences.
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