Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 4.5)
This chart illustrates the ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country.
An overall analysis showed that the given chart compared the percentage of households with electrical appliances.For instance, Washing machine, Refrigerator and Vaccum Cleaner between 1920 to 2019.
At the onset of 1920, a significant rise was seen in using refrigerator by people at 20%. However, the use of refrigerator gradually increased again between 1940 to 1980 at 100%. Moreover, the use of refrigerator remains same between 2000 to 2019 at 100%
on the other hand, a great rise was seen in use of vaccum cleaner in 1920 at 30%. However, the use of vaccume cleaner by people gradually increased between 1940 to 2000 at 100%. Moreover, in the next 19 nineteen years the use of vaccum cleaner remains same at 100%.
In case of washing machine excessive rise was seen in 1920 at 40%. However, in the next twenty years again increased in washing machine at 60%. Moreover, this increase ten % with no major fluctuation between 1960 to 2019 at 70%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the prompt by mentioning some appliances and data points, but it struggles to present a clear and accurate overview. For instance, the student states that the use of refrigerators reached 100% in 1940, whereas the graph indicates this happened in 1980, and misreads several other data points such as the initial 1920 figures. Furthermore, the number of hours spent doing housework is entirely omitted from the report, meaning key features of the visual data are missed. The overview is repetitive and lacks a proper summary of main trends. Ideas are limited and under-developed, resulting in a minimal response that only partially covers the requirements of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The organization of the text is somewhat disjointed. While the student attempts to structure the response into paragraphs for different appliances, the progression of information lacks clarity. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively, such as the frequent, mechanical reliance on 'However' and 'Moreover' to start sentences, which does not always fit the logical relationship between the data points. Referencing is occasionally confusing, and paragraphing is irregular, with sentences starting without proper spacing or logical connection. Overall, the arrangement of information lacks clear progression, leading to a choppy and difficult reading experience.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently reusing phrases like 'the use of' and 'gradually increased'. There are noticeable spelling errors, such as 'vaccum' instead of 'vacuum', and awkward word choices like 'excessive rise was seen'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for the task, with little flexibility or precision. While the meaning is occasionally communicated, the frequent lexical inaccuracies and simplistic phrasing restrict the response from achieving a higher level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The text displays a very limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on simple constructions and repetitive patterns. Attempts at more complex statements often result in grammatical errors, such as 'use of refrigerator remains same' (missing articles and tense consistency) and 'again increased in washing machine at 60%' (missing subjects and faulty prepositions). Frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and articles are present throughout the text, which can cause difficulty and confusion for the reader.
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