Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given two line graph compares the percentage of households with electrical appliances in year 1920 to 2019. There are different the electrical appliances such as Washing machine, Refrigerator, and Vaccum cleaner.

Overall, the given graphs illustrates the information about number of hours of housework per week, per household since 1920 to 2019. In first graph percentage of households were dramatically increasing, while the number of hours per week slightlt declined

The first graph is about percentage of households utilizing given electrical appliances between the year of 1920 to 2019. Firstly, in the year

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response falls well below the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly at only 94 words. Because the text is severely incomplete, it only partially addresses the task and fails to present a complete overview or report all the main features of the two charts. The introduction attempts to describe the first line graph, and the second paragraph tries to mention the second graph regarding the number of hours of housework, but the writing cuts off mid-sentence in the third paragraph. Consequently, the information is extremely limited and under-developed, preventing any comprehensive comparison or full reporting of the visual data provided.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The essay displays some basic organization, such as attempting an introductory overview paragraph with 'Overall, the given graphs illustrates...'. However, there is no clear overall progression or logical conclusion because the text terminates prematurely. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes inaccurate, as seen in the abrupt transitions between ideas. Paragraphing is attempted, but the final section consists of only a partial sentence ('Firstly, in the year'), which disrupts the flow and structure of the response, resulting in a disconnected and incomplete arrangement of information.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The lexical resource is limited and barely adequate for the task, with noticeable errors in word choice and spelling that reflect a restricted vocabulary. For instance, the student misspells vacuum cleaner as 'Vaccum cleaner' and uses awkward phrasing such as 'different the electrical appliances'. There is also repetition of basic descriptive terms like 'given graphs' and 'percentage of households'. While some standard vocabulary related to the topic is attempted, the range is narrow and insufficient to demonstrate flexibility or precision, leading to expressions that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The grammatical range is very limited, relying heavily on simple sentence structures and basic patterns. There are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation, including subject-verb agreement issues and incorrect articles or prepositions, such as 'The given two line graph compares' instead of 'The given two line graphs compare' and 'in year 1920 to 2019' instead of 'from 1920 to 2019'. Attempts at more complex structures are faulty, such as 'number of hours of housework per week, per household since 1920 to 2019', where the time preposition is misused. These frequent errors distract from the meaning.

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