Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The line graphs illustrate the differences that occurs in families that ownes demostic appliances and the average hours used in performing home work in residential houses in a particular country from 1920 and 2019. Units are measured in percentages.
Overall, it can be seen that refrigerator was the most popular house used equipment over five years, however it recorded zero use in the last year. This increase was followed by vaccum cleaner tool and it experience a slight marginal growth.Furthermore, washine machine was the least used tool and it experienced some fluctuations.
In 1920, refrigerator was the popular used demostic tool, it noticed a considerably increase reaching the peak of 100%, it then recorded a drastic change till 2000. Vacuum flask noticed a dramatic rise of 30% and rose to reach 100%, this two equipment had a gradual marginal increase till the given period. Washing machines had a noticable fluctuation
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response only partially addresses the task requirements. While the writer attempts to describe the charts showing electrical appliance ownership and housework hours, there are severe misinterpretations of the visual data. For example, the student claims the refrigerator recorded zero use in the last year, whereas the graph clearly shows it at one hundred percent, and mistakes the vacuum cleaner for a vacuum flask. Furthermore, the overview is confused and inaccurate, failing to present a clear picture of the overall trends. To move up, the writer must ensure that information is reported accurately from the visual data and that main features are correctly identified without major factual errors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
There is some organisation attempted with paragraph breaks separating the introduction, an overview, and body details, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as the mechanical and confusing transition 'This increase was followed by vaccum cleaner tool'. Referencing between sentences is frequently unclear, leaving the reader struggling to follow which appliance is being discussed. Paragraphing is also rudimentary and fails to group related information logically. Improving cohesion requires clearer referencing, more logical sequencing of data points, and the natural use of cohesive devices to link sentences and paragraphs smoothly.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and contains numerous noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. Examples of inaccurate terms include 'demostic appliances', 'home work', 'house used equipment', and 'washine machine'. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, but these attempts are marred by poor collocation and misspelling, such as 'considerably increase' instead of considerable increase, and 'vaccum cleaner'. To achieve a higher band, the student needs to expand their range of vocabulary, ensure correct word forms and spellings, and use terms that accurately reflect statistical data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The text displays a very limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on simple constructions, and attempts at more complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are frequent errors in grammar, including subject-verb agreement issues ('families that ownes', 'refrigerator was the popular used'), incorrect prepositions ('from 1920 and 2019'), and missing articles. These errors can cause confusion for the reader. To improve, the writer must work on basic grammatical accuracy, particularly verb forms, prepositions, and article usage, while gradually incorporating a wider variety of accurate complex sentence patterns.
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