Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The line graph is showing comparison betwwen different electrical appliances used in the houses of a country to do different house tasks for the time period between 1920 to 2019.
The given data is in percentages showing the households number.Appliances used are most common such as washing machine, refrigerators and vacuum cleaner.
In 1920 the use of refrigerator, vacuum cleaner and washing machine is 5, 30 and 40 percent respectively. However this usage has increased to 50-60 percent for all devices in 1940.In 1960 and subsequent years the use of washing machine remained the same almost maintaining a figure of 60 percent. However in 1980 there is a rise in refrigerator use upto 100 percent as compared to vacuum cleaner which reached to 90 percent in its use. However in 2019 the graph is showing no use of refrigerators while the other two appliances has maintained its usage percentages.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count of 150 words, falling short at 149 words. Furthermore, the content suffers from major inaccuracies regarding the visual data. For instance, the text claims that in 2019 the graph shows 'no use of refrigerators', whereas the chart clearly indicates that refrigerator ownership remained at 100 percent from 1980 onwards. The student omits any reference to the second chart detailing the hours of housework per week. Consequently, the response addresses the task only partially and contains severe factual misinterpretations, leading to a very low band placement.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The text lacks proper paragraphing, presented mostly as a single block or disjointed single-sentence paragraphs, which disrupts the logical flow. While basic cohesive devices such as 'However' and 'respectively' are attempted, their over-use and misplacement ('However this usage has increased...') hinder clear progression. The overall arrangement is disjointed, and referencing between ideas is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of trends over time.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
Vocabulary is limited and repetitive, featuring basic terms like 'use', 'devices', and 'appliances'. There are noticeable spelling mistakes, such as 'betwwen', and awkward word choices or collocations, including 'house tasks' instead of 'housework' and 'households number'. Less common lexical items are rarely attempted, and inaccurate word choices—such as confusing appliance usage with non-usage in 2019—cause significant confusion for the reader, restricting the score to this band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The range of grammatical structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent errors in tense consistency, articles, and prepositions. For example, the opening verb phrase 'is showing' should be simple present 'shows', and missing articles lead to ungrammatical phrasing like 'in households number'. Attempts at complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors persist throughout the text, although they do not entirely obscure the basic meaning.
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