Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The charts illustrates the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of the time spent doing in households in one country from 1920 to 2019.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances from 1920 to 2019. Percentage of households washing machine, 1920 forty percent after 20 years 20 percent increased and again twenty years after ten percent increased. But in 1980, percentage of washing household decrease five percent. After twenty years five percent increased. In 2019, 75 percent using of washing machine in house increased.

Refrigerator are invented in 19120 and using of refrigerator in house continously increased from 1920 to 2019 at the end hundred percent from zero percent.

Vacuum cleaner thirty percent used in 1920 after 99 years using of vacuum cleaner increased continously and stuck at 100 percent usage of vacuum cleaner.

Number of hours of housework per week, per household 1920 to 2019. In 1920, 50 hours and continously decreased still 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response falls slightly short of the minimum word count requirement, coming in at 149 words (with 8 words copied from the prompt excluded). The student attempts to address the task by mentioning both charts, but the coverage is minimal and tangential in places. While some key features are noted, such as the overall rise in appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours, the data is frequently imprecise or difficult to follow. Sentences like "Refrigerator are invented in 19120" show a misunderstanding of the visual data. The response lacks a clear overview and fails to make relevant comparisons effectively, limiting the development of ideas to a very basic level.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The organization of the response is disjointed, and information is not arranged coherently. Although the student attempts to separate paragraphs by topic, the lack of a proper overarching structure prevents any clear progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, resulting in abrupt transitions between sentences and ideas, such as moving abruptly from the washing machine to refrigerators without logical connectors. Referencing is also weak, making it difficult to follow which data points are being contrasted. Paragraphing is attempted, but it is insufficient to guide the reader through the data logically.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and severely limited for an academic task. Words and phrases such as "increased continously" and "percent using of washing machine" demonstrate a lack of lexical control. There are numerous word choice and word formation errors, such as "invented" instead of "introduced" or "acquired", and typographical slips like "19120". These lexical inaccuracies and repetitive phrasing strain the reader and impede clear communication throughout the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, relying heavily on simple structures with frequent errors in basic sentence construction. There is a lack of control over verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, as seen in "percentage of washing household decrease" and "using of vacuum cleaner increased continously". Punctuation is also problematic, and frequent errors in basic grammar distort meaning and cause significant difficulty for the reader. Complex structures are largely absent, and the few attempts at variation result in faulty phrasing.

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