Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line charts illustrate the percentage of households owning three specific electrical appliances [redacted phone] and amount of time spent doing house work in house holds in one country between 1920 and 2019.

overall,In 1920 refrigerator was low percentage while others like washing machine and vacuum cleaner was high perecntage.

Refrigerators were 0% in 1920 while washing machines were 40% in 1920,vacuum cleaner were 30% in 1920.After 20 years vacuum cleaner was 50% while refrigerator was 55% and wsahing machine was 60% in 1940.some ups and downs was in 1960,1980 and 2000.Vaccum cleaner was 100% in 2019 while refrigerator was also same 100% in 2019, washing machine was 75% almost use households and home electrical appliances in 2019.

Number of hours of house work like washing clothes, perparing meals and cleaning as per week, per household in [redacted phone]. In 1920 was 50 hours per week, 1940 was 35 hours per week while decrease in 1960 20 hours oer week, more decrease in 1980 and 2000 while decrease was10 hours per week in 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response presents a partial overview of the visual data by identifying some main features, such as the general trends in appliance ownership and the decline in housework hours. However, the details provided are sometimes inaccurate or incomplete. For example, the student states that refrigerators were at 0% in 1920, whereas the data shows approximately 2%, and there are mechanical listings of figures without sufficient comparison or synthesis. The overview attempted in the second paragraph is underdeveloped and lacks clarity, resulting in a limited treatment of the prompt. To reach a higher standard, the response needs to select and highlight the most striking features more clearly, ensure complete data accuracy, and offer meaningful comparisons across both charts throughout the period.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The writing demonstrates some organisation, but lacks a clear overall progression. Paragraphing is poorly handled, with the second paragraph starting abruptly with a lowercase error ('overall,In') and cramming multiple disparate observations into a single block of text. Cohesive devices are either missing or repetitive, and referencing between sentences is weak. For instance, the transition from appliance ownership data to the housework hours section in the final paragraph lacks a proper signpost or logical bridge. To improve, the student should structure the essay into distinct, logical paragraphs—such as a dedicated introduction, an overview paragraph, and well-grouped body paragraphs—and employ a wider variety of accurate cohesive links to guide the reader smoothly through the information.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited but minimally adequate to convey the basic topic of household appliances and housework. There are several noticeable lexical errors, awkward word choices, and spelling mistakes, such as 'perecntage', 'house work', 'house holds', 'wsahing', and 'Vaccum'. The student attempts some less common terms like 'electrical appliances', but inaccuracies in word form and collocation occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. To achieve a higher band, the student must expand their vocabulary range, use precise terms for trends and data reporting, and pay closer attention to correct spelling and word formation, avoiding direct errors in basic subject-specific terminology.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response displays a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple clauses and repetitive lists of data linked with 'while' or 'and'. Attempts at more complex structures are frequently faulty, leading to missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and grammatical confusion, such as in 'washing machine and vacuum cleaner was high perecntage' and 'some ups and downs was in 1960'. Frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, articles, and punctuation occur throughout the text and often strain the reader. To improve, the student needs to practice forming accurate complex sentences, maintain strict control over singular and plural verb agreements, and carefully proofread to eliminate basic punctuation and capitalization errors.

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