Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar charts illustrates the information regarding the change in ownership of elecrtrical equipments and amount of time spent doing housework in households in a specific country between 1920 and 2019.

It is crystal clear that, refrigerator and vaccum cleaner both showed the highest percentage and the washing machine accounted the lowest trend. Meanwhile, number of hours per week showed the downward trend during the given period.

It is first glance, in 1920 washing machine started business from 40% ,which increased in four decades and reached at 70% .After that it decreased aroung 62% in 1980 and then rise slightly and reached on 72% in 2019. However, refrigerator commenced from 0% in 1920 and it went up drastically in next decades such as 55% in 1940 , 90% in 1960 and 100% in 1980. Afterthat it stable next four decades on 100% till the end of the period.

As similarly, vaccum cleaner started up 30% in 1920. then it also dramatically rose every decades 50% in 1940 and and 100% in 2000 and then stabled till 2019. While on the other hand the number of hours of house work per week decresed slightly it was 50% in 1920 which fell down in 1940 at 35% and in 1960 at 20% , then it was declined and reached 10% at the end of the period in 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and provide a clear overview: appliance ownership generally rose, while weekly housework hours fell. You also select useful comparisons, including refrigerators reaching 100% by 1980 and washing-machine ownership dipping before rising again. This meets the task well, with some of the detail needed for a stronger overview already present. However, the overview is not fully accurate: refrigerators and vacuum cleaners did not both show the highest percentage throughout, since refrigerators began at about 2% and washing machines were higher in 1920. Some figures are also imprecise: washing machines were about 65% in 1980, and housework fell to about 11 hours in 2019. Clarify the overall ranking and report these details more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing the appliance trends and housework hours. The sequence generally follows the years, and linking expressions such as “However” and “While” help signal contrasts. This gives the report an overall coherent arrangement. Cohesion is sometimes mechanical or unclear, though. For example, “As similarly” and “While on the other hand” combine linking expressions awkwardly, while “It is first glance” does not clearly introduce the next point. The final paragraph also moves between vacuum cleaners and housework without a clean transition. Use simpler, accurate connectors and group related trends consistently so the reader can follow comparisons more easily.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “ownership,” “percentage,” “downward trend,” and “increased,” so the main information is usually understandable. There is also an attempt to vary language with terms such as “drastically” and “declined.” However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or unnatural: “started business” does not describe a chart trend, “reached on” is not the right pattern, and “stabled” is not the appropriate verb. Spelling errors such as “elecrtrical,” “vaccum,” and “decresed” are noticeable, and repeated use of “rose” and “reached” limits precision. Choose standard trend language and check spelling carefully to make the report more fluent and exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses linked with “which” and “after that,” and the reader can generally understand the main trends. However, control is uneven, and several sentence patterns contain errors. The opening says “The bar charts illustrates,” where the subject and verb do not agree; “the washing machine accounted the lowest trend” also lacks a grammatical construction. In “it decreased around 62%,” the intended meaning needs a clearer form, such as “it fell to around 65%.” Commas and spacing are inconsistent, and some sentences run together, particularly in the vacuum-cleaner paragraph. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, verb forms, and punctuation while keeping complex sentences manageable.

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