Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

INTODUCTION:

this line chat show the change in ownership of electrical appliciant and amount of time in household in one country from 1920 to 2019.

OVERVIEW:

Overall, the washing machine is gained higher percentage in start and lower in last similarly, refrigerator obtained lowest in start and higher at the end.

PARAGRAPH:1

In 1920, wasing machine is stay on 40% and grew to 70% in 1960 but little slow in 1980 and again grew to 70% in 2019 its was 72%

PARAGRAPH:2

Refrigerator is stay almost 2% in 1920 but it higher grow and obtained 53% in 1940 similarly it get 90%in 1960 and reach on 100% in 2000 to 2019. At the last, washing machine was 30% in 1920 and went to 50% in 1940 As well as washing machine obtained 70% in 1960 and little grew to 90% in 1980 after this its ratio is 100% in 2000 and same that in 2019 .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the topic and report several relevant figures, including the washing machine’s 40% starting point and the refrigerator’s rise from about 2% to full ownership. However, the overview does not capture the main picture accurately: washing-machine ownership did not finish lower, but rose overall to about 75%, while housework hours fell substantially from 50 to 11 per week and are not mentioned. The final paragraph also mislabels the vacuum-cleaner figures as washing-machine data, so the comparisons are confusing. To improve, give a clear overview of both charts, then describe each appliance accurately and include the steady decline in housework time.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an introduction, an overview and separate body sections, which gives it a basic framework. Some chronological sequencing is also visible through references such as “In 1920” and “in 1960.” However, the information is not arranged coherently: the final paragraph shifts from refrigerators to vacuum cleaners without signalling the change, and calls the vacuum-cleaner data “washing machine” figures. Connections such as “similarly,” “as well as” and “after this” do not always show the intended relationship, making the progression difficult to follow. Organise the body by appliance or chart, use clear transitions, and keep each series’ figures together.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “ownership,” “grew” and “reach,” so the reader can recognise that the response describes trends. However, the range is basic and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “line chat,” “obtained lowest,” “higher grow” and “little slow.” Spelling errors, including “appliciant” and “wasing,” also reduce clarity and control. Aim for precise trend language and accurate appliance names; for example, describe a figure as “rose to” a percentage or “remained stable,” rather than saying it “obtained” a value. This would make comparisons clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts simple statements and some longer sentences linked with words such as “but,” “similarly” and “after this.” However, sentence structures are very limited, and errors occur frequently in verb forms, articles and sentence construction. Examples include “the washing machine is gained higher percentage,” “wasing machine is stay on 40%” and “it higher grow.” These patterns make some relationships between figures hard to understand. Practise past-tense reporting forms such as “ownership stood at 40%” and “it rose to 70%,” and check that each sentence has a clear subject and correctly formed verb. More accurate simple sentences should come before adding complex structures.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.