Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the bar chart illustrate the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in household in one country the washing machine the refrigerator and vacum cleaner between 1920 and 2019

overall acess rose in three per household in 1920 washing machine started with the highest and ended with the lowest while refrigerator started with the lowest but ended for highest the vacuum cleaner began increasing and ended to increasing

in 1920 washing washing started with 40% compared to 0% for refrigerator the refrigerator decreasing for thr lowest but in 1960 both of level mashing machine 70%various 90% while the washing machine in 2000 was overtook refrigerator 70% various100% reached 100% by 2019 and mashing machine than increase to 73% in 2019

the vaccum cleaner started 30% with highest figures and then more increasing and reached to 100% in 2000 and in 2019 reached same 100% by the end of the period

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify the topic and attempt an overview, noting that appliance ownership generally rose and that refrigerators became the most widely owned item. However, the overview is unclear and some key comparisons are inaccurate: washing machines did not finish with the lowest ownership, since they reached about 75%, above the initial level for any appliance but below the two items at 100%. The account also omits the second chart entirely: housework fell from 50 to 11 hours per week, an important overall trend. Several figures and descriptions are confused, including saying the refrigerator was “decreasing” and that the washing machine overtook it. The response is also 9 words below the 150-word minimum. Include both charts, give a clear overview, and select accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an opening, an overview and detail paragraphs, and the discussion broadly follows the appliance categories. This gives the reader some sense of the intended progression. However, connections between ideas are often unclear, and the final paragraph repeats the same endpoint for the vacuum cleaner. The second detail paragraph combines several years and appliances in a confusing sequence, for example, “in 1960 both of level” followed by the 2000 comparison. There is no paragraph or transition for the housework data. Use one paragraph for the overview, then group the appliance trends and housework trend logically, with clear time markers and comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “ownership,” “reached,” “highest” and “compared to,” so the topic is recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to follow: “overall acess rose in three per household” and “ended to increasing” do not express the trends clearly. Spelling errors such as “vacum,” “mashing” and “various” also reduce precision, while repeated use of “started” and “reached” limits variety. Aim for accurate trend language and appliance names, and use terms such as “rose,” “declined,” “levelled off” and “ownership rate” where appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentence forms and uses basic past-tense reporting, but grammatical control is inconsistent. Missing articles and sentence boundaries appear in the opening (“in household in one country”), while the overview contains an incomplete or unclear construction: “overall acess rose in three per household.” Agreement and verb forms are also problematic in phrases such as “the refrigerator decreasing” and “the vacuum cleaner began increasing and ended to increasing.” These errors often make relationships between figures hard to understand. Build clearer sentences with a subject and finite verb, use the past tense consistently for the period, and check articles, plurals and punctuation. Short, accurate comparisons would improve clarity before adding more complex structures.

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