Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph illustrate changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amounyt of time spend doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Overall,percentage of house hold is Y axis and year is related to X axis but the number of hours of housework per week, per household that housework is equal but some different thing washing machgine refrigeratoe vacum cleaner thaan cleaning

In 1920 washing machine go up than 1980 dip and 2019 inch up. refrigerator in 1920 is grow and 1980 is surge and 2019 is pick up . and last is vaacuum cleaner is recover in 1920 1980 is rebond than 2019 is after a fall.

On the other hand , numbers of hours of housework per week, is present washing clothes , preparing meals , cleaning of hours per week shoot up in 1920 then fall is 1960 than 1980 is drop and decline is 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the two broad subjects—appliance ownership and housework time—and attempts to describe changes over the period. However, the main trends and comparisons are not reported accurately or clearly: for example, the refrigerator reaches 100% by 1980 and stays there, while the response says it “surge[s]” and then “pick[s] up” without giving a clear pattern. The vacuum cleaner rises steadily to 100%, rather than experiencing “a fall,” and housework hours generally decline, not “shoot up in 1920.” There is no clear overview of the key features, and most figures are omitted. The response is also 142 words, below the required 150 words (11 prompt words were excluded from the count). Add a concise overview and accurate supporting comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, an attempted overview, and separate descriptions of appliance ownership and housework. The phrase “On the other hand” signals a shift to the second chart, so the reader can see an effort to connect sections. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow. The overview mixes axis information with unclear comments about the appliances, while the next paragraph lists trends without a consistent comparison or clear time sequence. Linking phrases such as “and” and “than” do not reliably show how the data relate. Organise the response around a clear overview, then describe appliance trends in chronological order and finish with the housework trend, using precise links such as “by contrast” only where appropriate.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response attempts trend vocabulary, including “dip,” “surge,” “recover,” “rebound,” and “decline,” showing an effort to describe change. However, many choices are inaccurate or do not fit the data: “pick up” and “after a fall” misrepresent the refrigerator and vacuum-cleaner trends, and “shoot up” is unsuitable for the steady decline in housework hours. Basic phrases such as “go up” and “is grow” are repeated, while misspellings such as “amounyt,” “machgine,” “refrigeratoe,” and “vaacuum” make the text harder to read. Use a smaller set of precise terms—“rose,” “fell slightly,” “levelled off,” and “reached 100%”—and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response shows an attempt to use more than isolated phrases, including a complex opening sentence and time references. However, sentence structures are often incomplete or inaccurately formed, which makes relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “The line graph illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, and “refrigerator in 1920 is grow” uses an incorrect verb form. The overview sentence beginning “Overall, percentage of house hold is Y axis” does not form a clear grammatical statement, and several clauses are joined without effective punctuation. The final paragraph also shifts between present and past forms without a consistent pattern. Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, use past-tense verbs for historical changes, and punctuate each comparison as a separate clause.

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