Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

cambridge writing task 1

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The line charts demostrate the variations in the holders of electrical machines and how much time utilized on completing house chores in households in a nation from 1920 to 2019.

Overall, the percentage of ownership of electrical appliances experienced an increasing trend over the period. In contrast, the number of hours to do housework per week faced a downfall throughout the given period.

Moving into more details, the proportion of refrigerator owners comprised the highest changes, it was at 0% in 1920 and inclined significantly to more than 50% in 20 years. After next 20 years, it was accounted for 90% and stood at 100% in 1980. After this, it remained stable until 2019. Moreover, the percentile of the ownership of vacuum cleaner increased considerably from 30% to 90% in 6 decades, it faced a slight surge at the peak in 2000 and plateaued for next 19 years. Furthermore, the percentage of washing machine holders experienced fluctuation, it escalated marginally from 40% to 70% in 1960 then fell slightly to almost 55%. Afterwards, it rose to around 74% in 2019.

Meanwhile, the numbers of hours of house tasks declined rapidly, which was 50% in 1920 and fell to 20% in 1960. Subsequently, it went down minimally from 20% to almost 10% in 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response7.0
Coherence and Cohesion7.0
Lexical Resource6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy6.0
Overall6.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You give a clear overview of the two main trends: appliance ownership generally rose, while weekly housework time fell. The body also selects useful comparisons, including refrigerators reaching full ownership by 1980 and vacuum cleaners reaching 100% by 2000. Most reported figures match the chart, and the response covers both graphs. A few details are inaccurate or imprecise: refrigerator ownership was about 2%, not 0%, in 1920; washing-machine ownership fell from 70% to about 65% in 1980, rather than to almost 55%; and housework time is measured in hours, not percentages. The overview also overgeneralises slightly because washing-machine ownership dipped before rising again. More precise reporting of these exceptions would strengthen an otherwise well-supported summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response is organised effectively into an introduction, an overview, appliance details and a final paragraph on housework time. The progression from the overall trends to individual series is easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Moreover,” “Furthermore” and “Meanwhile” help signal relationships between points. The main limitation is that several transitions are used mechanically, and some sentences join separate chart details with commas, making the progression less controlled—for example, the refrigerator sentence beginning “the proportion of refrigerator owners” combines several stages in one long sequence. Grouping the appliance comparisons more deliberately and using clearer sentence boundaries would make the cohesion more flexible and natural.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary to describe trends, including “inclined significantly,” “remained stable,” “increased considerably” and “plateaued.” These choices show an attempt to vary the language rather than repeat basic verbs. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “holders of electrical machines,” “time utilized on completing house chores,” “comprised the highest changes” and “the percentile of the ownership.” “Fluctuation” is also not quite accurate for the washing-machine trend, which has one modest decline followed by a rise. There is also a spelling error in “demostrate.” Prefer standard chart language such as “households owning appliances,” “time spent on housework” and “the proportion of households.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “which” and time phrases such as “After next 20 years.” The overall meaning is generally clear, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “the proportion … comprised the highest changes” has an unclear sentence structure, while “it was accounted for 90%” uses an incorrect passive construction. In “the numbers of hours … declined rapidly, which was 50%,” the relative clause does not attach clearly to the intended idea. The final paragraph also uses “50%” and “20%” where the chart’s measure requires hours. Work on accurate clause construction, articles and prepositions in time expressions, and check that pronouns clearly refer to the intended subject. These corrections would make the varied sentence forms more reliable.

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