Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts illustrates changing the percentage of households the owned three electrical applications namely washing machine ,refrigerator and vaccum cleaner and the averarge number of hours spent on housework per week in one country between [redacted phone] .

Overall ownership of three applicances increased considerbly over the period, with refrigerator and vaccum cleaners eventually becoming almost universal. In contrast, the amount of time spent on housework decreased dramitically.

In 1920, washing machines were the most common aplicance , being found in 40% household, while vaccum cleaner were owned 30% , refrigerators were not owned by any households at his time. By 1940 , ownership of washing machine has risen 60% , while the figures of refrigerator and vaccum cleaners reached approximately only 55%-50% respectively.

The most significant growth occured [redacted phone]. Refrigrated ownership climbed sharply 90% and proportion of households vaccum cleaners increased 70%. Waahing machines ownership also reachin around 70% . By 1980 , refrigerates abve reached 100% and vaccum cleaners were present in 90%of homes . The figure of washing machines ,however slightly to approximately 65%.

In 1980, the refrigerator ownership is 100% . while the vaccum cleaners is reached in 2000. The washing machines is reached recoverd genually 75% in 2019.

In summry , the hours of housework per week per household increingly by per week . The felt steadily about 50 hours per week in 1920 to on 10 hours in 2019. The substanial with increasig availability and ownership of household apllicances.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and identify the main contrast: appliance ownership generally rose while housework time fell. Several key figures are reported accurately, including washing machines at 40% in 1920, refrigerators at 90% in 1960, and refrigerators reaching 100% by 1980. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: refrigerators were owned by about 2% of households in 1920, not none, and the final paragraph says housework time “increas[ed]” even though it declined from 50 to about 11 hours. The overview is relevant, but the housework trend is not clearly summarised there, and the final comparison with appliance ownership is incomplete. A clearer overview and a consistent account of the second chart would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and paragraphs describing the data. The chronological sequence also helps readers follow changes from 1920 to 2019. However, progression becomes unclear in the final two paragraphs: the 1980 and 2000 refrigerator figures are repeated, and the last paragraph shifts abruptly to housework without a clear transition. Linking phrases such as “By 1980” and “In contrast” are useful, but some connections are mechanical or incomplete, as in “In 1980, the refrigerator ownership is 100% . while…” Consider grouping the appliance trends together and giving the housework figures their own focused paragraph, with clear comparisons across the period.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of task-relevant vocabulary, including “ownership,” “eventually becoming almost universal,” “climbed sharply” and “decreased dramatically.” These choices show an effort to describe trends rather than simply list figures. However, spelling errors are frequent and sometimes make the text difficult to read, for example “vaccum,” “aplicance,” “Refrigrated” and “substanial.” There are also inaccurate or unnatural combinations such as “the figure … slightly” and “ownership … reachin.” Use standard trend collocations consistently, such as “the proportion rose,” “reached 100%” and “fell steadily.” Proofreading spelling and choosing precise nouns for each appliance would improve clarity and control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some varied sentence forms, including a contrastive overview (“In contrast…”) and a participial phrase (“being found in 40%…”). However, grammatical control is uneven, and errors in sentence construction, agreement, tense and punctuation sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “The charts illustrates,” “washing machine has risen 60%,” and “The washing machines is reached recoverd genually 75%.” The final paragraph also contains an incomplete or malformed sentence: “The substanial with increasig availability…” Aim for complete clauses with a clear subject and verb, and check singular/plural agreement and past-tense reporting. For example: “Ownership of washing machines rose to 60% by 1940.”

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