Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates the changes in ownership of electrical and amount of time spent doing housework in household in one country starting from 1920 to 2019 end.

overall, it is clear that in 1920 the percentage of refrigerator was increase coninously. The washing machine shows the increacing but witrh the time period its decrease, while hourse per week shows decline with the time period.

Regarding, in 1920 the percentage of washing machine at 40, the refrigerator at 0 percent and the vacuum cleaner at 30. Followed by, the highest number in 1940 was waching machine at 60. The number of refrigerator was lastly above from 50. In 1960 washing machine and vocuum cleaner were the same number that at 70 but the refrigrator at 90. In 1980 the washing machine show deline whilw the refrigrator and vacuume cleaner increase but below 100 number.The refrigrator was end in 2000 but the vaccume cleaner on just below 100 and the washing machine on 70.In 2019 the number of washing machine on just above 70 and the use of vacuume cleaner was reached to 100.In 1920, the number of per week was on 50 but in 1940 to 2019 was still decreased and at the end was on 10 hours.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad pattern that appliance ownership generally rose while housework time fell, and you include figures for several years. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: “the percentage of refrigerator was increase coninously” does not describe the trend grammatically, and the washing-machine figure actually dips from about 70% in 1960 to 65% in 1980 before rising. Some details are also misreported: refrigerators reached 100% by 1980 and remained there, while vacuum-cleaner ownership reached 100% by 2000, not 2019. The housework figure falls to about 11 hours in 2019, which you report approximately correctly. To make the report more complete, give a clear overview and compare the main trends accurately rather than listing figures with unclear relationships.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic structure, with an opening, an overview, and a paragraph of details, and it generally moves through the years in chronological order. This gives the reader some sense of progression. However, connections between points are often unclear or mechanical: “Followed by” and “Regarding” do not link the data naturally, and the long final paragraph strings many years together without clear sentence boundaries. The overview also combines several trends in a way that is difficult to follow. Use separate paragraphs for the main appliance trends and housework hours, and organise comparisons by trend or period. Clear linking phrases such as “By contrast” and “Meanwhile” would help show how the series relate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “decline,” “increase,” and “reached,” so the reader can recognise that you are describing a line graph. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to interpret, such as “the percentage of refrigerator,” “was lastly above from 50,” and “the refrigerator was end in 2000.” Spelling errors, including “coninously,” “waching,” and “refrigrator,” also reduce clarity. Aim for accurate graph language and consistent equipment names: for example, “the proportion of households with a refrigerator” and “rose to 90%.” Proofreading spelling and avoiding repeated use of “number” would make the report more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to use both simple statements and longer comparisons, and the chronological sequence is mostly understandable. However, sentence structures are limited, and errors in verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence construction occur frequently enough to make some details hard to follow. Examples include “the percentage of refrigerator was increase,” “the washing machine show deline,” and “the number of per week was on 50.” Several clauses are joined without clear punctuation, particularly in the long sequence beginning “In 1980.” Practise accurate past-tense reporting (“rose,” “fell,” “stood at”) and build complete sentences with a clear subject and verb. Shorter, correctly punctuated comparisons would improve control.

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