Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates the proportion of household goods in several years and the number of hours spent per week on housework.

Overall, the percentage of all three electrical devices showed inclination. Vacuum cleaner made up the largest proportion, followed by refrigerator with constant inclination. While, washing machine showed slight fluctuations. In contrast, hours per week showed declinition over the period.

Starting with the proportions of electrical appliances, the figure for refrigerator commenced at 0% in the year 1920, followed by a steady incline of 90% in 1960. It showed steady growth with the figure of 100% in the year 2000. Whereas, the percentage for washing machine started from 40% in 1920, it rose to the value of 70% in the year 1960. Subsequently, it experienced a slight decline with the value accounting for approximately 65% in 1980. It peaked at nearly 74% in 2019. In contrast, the percentage of vacuum cleaner showed steady increase of 100% till the year 2000 and then it experienced constant growth.

Turning to the figures of number of hours of housework per week started at 50% in 1920, followed by steady decrease of 20% in in 1960. The figure reached its lowest point of 10% in 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and provide a clear overview of the broad trends: appliance ownership generally rose, while housework time fell. Several useful comparisons are included, such as the washing-machine dip to about 65% in 1980 and the refrigerator reaching 100%. However, some key details are inaccurate or unclear. The refrigerator began at about 2%, not 0%, and the vacuum cleaner reached 100% in 2000 and then remained stable; it did not show “constant growth” after that. The overview also incorrectly says the vacuum cleaner had the largest proportion overall, since the refrigerator was higher in 1960 and both appliances later reached 100%. The housework figures are described as percentages rather than hours, and the 1940 and 1980 values are omitted. More precise reporting would strengthen coverage.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for appliance ownership and housework. This gives the reader a generally coherent route through the information, and transitions such as “Starting with” and “Turning to” help signal the shift in focus. However, some linking is mechanical or awkward, particularly “Whereas” beginning a sentence fragment and “In contrast” where the comparison is not clearly established. Within the appliance paragraph, the sequence moves between refrigerator, washing machine and vacuum cleaner without consistently explaining how their trends compare. Grouping the refrigerator and vacuum cleaner together as appliances that reached full ownership, then contrasting the washing machine, would make progression clearer and cohesion less dependent on formulaic transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of trend vocabulary, including “proportion,” “steady growth,” “slight decline,” and “peaked,” which is appropriate for describing a line graph. However, several noticeable word-choice and collocation problems reduce precision: “showed inclination” and “constant inclination” are unnatural, while “declinition” is misspelled and “goods” is too broad for the specific appliances shown. “Made up the largest proportion” also gives an inaccurate impression of the data. Use standard, precise expressions such as “ownership increased,” “remained stable,” and “household ownership of refrigerators.” Check spelling and choose vocabulary that describes the direction of change accurately; this would make the report clearer and more natural without requiring more elaborate wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

There is some variety in sentence construction, including longer sentences with time clauses and contrast, and the main trends are usually understandable. However, attempts at complex structures are not consistently controlled. For example, “Whereas, the percentage for washing machine started…” is an incomplete construction, and “Turning to the figures of number of hours … started” lacks a clear grammatical subject. The phrase “followed by steady decrease of 20% in in 1960” also contains a repeated preposition and an unclear relationship between the figures. Articles and sentence boundaries need attention in phrases such as “the percentage for washing machine.” Aim for complete clauses with a clearly stated subject, and proofread for repeated words and missing grammatical elements.

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