Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph illustrates the transfrom in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. It can be seen that, the significant alter in refrigerator in year 1920 and 2000. whereas, vacumm cleaner maintain rapid position in year 1920 and 2019.

It is evident that, The refrigerator rise 0 to 90 % of households in year 1920 and 1960. whereas, vacuum cleaner relocate form 30 % to 90% in year 1920 and 1980. Moreover, washing machine grew drastically from 40% to 70% in year 1920 and 1960 then drip to 60%, and stable at around 70% in year 2019. however, vacuum cleaner grew dramatically and reach 100% by 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the general topic and report several relevant appliance trends, including the refrigerator’s rise and the vacuum cleaner’s increase. However, the response is substantially incomplete: it contains 100 words, below the required 150, and omits the housework-hours series entirely. The overview is also unclear and partly inaccurate: the refrigerator reaches about 90% in 1960, but it is already at 100% by 1980 and remains there, while the opening comparison of 1920 and 2000 is not explained. The washing-machine figures are misreported: it falls to about 65% in 1980, not 60%, and then rises. Include both charts, give a clear overview of the main contrasts, and support it with accurate key figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has two paragraphs and uses linking expressions such as “Moreover” and “whereas,” so there is some attempt to organise and connect information. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the first paragraph gives an unclear overview and the second moves between appliances without a consistent comparison. Several connectors are used inaccurately or awkwardly, and sentence openings such as “It can be seen that” and “It is evident that” are repetitive. The missing housework information also leaves the report without a complete progression through the task. A clearer structure would be an overview followed by grouped comparisons, with each paragraph covering related trends and transitions used only where the relationship is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of trend vocabulary, including “ownership,” “drastically,” “maintain,” and “dramatically,” and the topic is generally recognisable. However, several word choices, forms, and spellings are inaccurate or unnatural, sometimes making the intended meaning unclear: “transfrom,” “alter,” “relocate,” and “drip” do not express the trends precisely. Phrases such as “maintain rapid position” and “significant alter in refrigerator” are also not natural collocations. Use straightforward, accurate language for describing data before attempting more ambitious terms. Check spelling carefully and choose verbs that match the direction of change, such as “rose,” “fell,” “remained stable,” and “reached.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You produce some complete sentences and attempt to combine ideas using contrast and sequence, for example in the sentence beginning “Moreover, washing machine grew…” However, grammatical control is inconsistent. There are problems with articles and sentence structure (“the refrigerator rise”), verb forms and agreement (“vacuum cleaner relocate”), and punctuation, including commas after introductory phrases and lower-case “whereas” after a full stop. The final sentence also lacks a clear subject for “reach.” These errors make several statements difficult to interpret, although the basic topic remains apparent. Practise accurate simple comparisons first, then combine them with clauses using “while” or “whereas,” checking tense, articles, and punctuation in each sentence.

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