Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The charts illustrate the changes in ownership of electronic amenities and the proportion of time spent doing housework in a country from 1920 to 2019 over an interval of decades.

Overall, as the percentage of owners of electrical appliances kept on increasing, the number of hours spent on housework per week kept on decreasing. A drastic change in both the percentage of owner of electrical goods and the number of hours spent on housework could be seen from 1920 to 1960.

In 1920, only 0%, 30% and 40% of people had refrigerator, vacuum cleaner and washing machine respectively. For that reason, people spent 50 hours on housework every week. After two decades in 1940, the percentage of owners shoot up where a significant change could be seen in the percentage for owners of a refrigerator. Almost 55% of people owned a refrigerator. Aside that, percentage of people who owned washing machines and vacuum cleaners also rose to 60% and 50% respectively. As a result, the numbers of hours on house work also reduced to almost 35 hours.

Another shift in percentage of owners was also seen in 1960 where the percentage of owners of vacuum cleaner and washing machine converged a

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main relationship accurately: appliance ownership generally rose while weekly housework fell, and you support this with figures for 1920 and 1940. The refrigerator’s sharp increase to about 55% in 1940 is also correctly highlighted. However, the response gives only the beginning of the later-period account: it ends while describing 1960 and does not report the subsequent trends or the final figures, such as refrigerators and vacuum cleaners reaching 100% or housework falling to about 11 hours. The overview also overgeneralises slightly because washing-machine ownership dipped between 1960 and 1980. To make the summary more complete, report the key later changes and qualify the overall trend where a series fluctuates.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and chronological detail, and phrases such as “Overall” and “After two decades” help signal progression. The account is generally easy to follow through 1940. However, the final paragraph begins a new stage with “Another shift” but stops mid-sentence, so the progression across the full period is not completed. Some links are also mechanical or unclear: “For that reason” suggests a direct causal explanation between appliance ownership and housework hours, while the charts show a relationship rather than proving causation. “Aside that” is not an effective linking phrase. Organise the body into complete, balanced periods and use transitions that show comparison or sequence without implying unsupported causes.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “ownership,” “percentage,” “significant change,” “reduced” and “converged,” and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “drastic change.” Some choices are imprecise or unnatural for describing the charts: “electronic amenities” and “electrical goods” vary the label unnecessarily, while “percentage of owners shoot up” is an awkward collocation and uses an unsuitable form. “Proportion of time” is also inaccurate because the second chart measures hours per week, not a proportion. Use consistent terms such as “households owning appliances” and “weekly housework hours,” and choose precise trend language. These refinements would make the description more natural and exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and most of the information remains understandable. For example, the overview uses a contrast between appliance ownership and housework hours, while the 1940 section combines several figures in connected sentences. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with articles, agreement and verb forms: “had refrigerator” needs an article, “percentage of owner” has a number/agreement problem, and “owners shoot up” does not maintain the past tense used for the historical data. The final sentence is incomplete, which also affects grammatical control. Check articles with singular countable nouns, keep subjects and verbs in agreement, and use past-tense forms consistently. Completing each sentence before moving to the next point will improve accuracy without sacrificing sentence variety.

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