Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graphs reveal about the changes in ownerships of electrical and peaple spent time doing housework in households in one country from 1920 to 2019
overall , the highest was refrigerator or vacuum cleaner whereas the lowest was washing machine
In detail , the poeple spent time did households washing machine stood at 40 percentage in 1920 It increased significantly to 60 in 1940, while after one year it climed slightly at 70 percentage but in 1980 this figure showed downword trend after one year it remain stabled with 75 percentage in 2019 the refrigerator used by poeple started with 0 percentage in 1920 and then it remain at 50 percentage in 1940 but it increased with 90 percentage in 1960 after one year this figure showed stabled trend at 100 percentage in 2019
moving further , the number of hours housework by the poeple this started with 50 per week in1920 then it showed downword trend at 35 per week this figure decreased with 20 in 1960 it decreased seen at 10 in 2019 per week
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
You identify the broad relationship between appliance ownership and housework time, and include several relevant figures, such as washing machines rising from 40% to 70% by 1960 and housework falling from 50 to 20 hours. However, the overview is unclear and incomplete: saying “the highest was refrigerator or vacuum cleaner whereas the lowest was washing machine” does not summarise the main trends, and it omits the substantial decline in housework. Several details are inaccurate or confusing: the refrigerator began at about 2%, not 0%, and reached 55% in 1940, rather than 50%; the washing-machine figure fell in 1980 and then rose to 75% by 2019, not remaining stable at 75%. The vacuum cleaner series is not reported, and the final housework figure is about 11 hours. Select and compare the key trends more accurately.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and two detail sections, with transitions such as “In detail” and “moving further.” This gives the reader some sense of how the information is organised. However, progression within the detail paragraphs is difficult to follow because several appliance series are combined in long, loosely connected sentences, and the housework trend is added without a clear comparison. Phrases such as “after one year” are especially confusing when the chart’s intervals are generally twenty years. Use one paragraph for appliance ownership and another for housework, and group figures by trend. Clearer sentence boundaries and more precise links between comparisons would make the organisation easier to follow.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “increased,” “decreased,” “percentage,” and “hours per week,” so the main subject is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to interpret. For example, “ownerships of electrical” and “the people spent time did households washing machine” do not express the intended ideas clearly; “showed downword trend” is repeated, and “remained stabled” is not an appropriate form. Spelling errors such as “peaple,” “poeple,” and “climed” also reduce clarity. Build a more precise set of trend and comparison phrases, and check spelling and collocations before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
There are attempts to connect ideas using clauses and time expressions, for example, “It increased significantly to 60 in 1940, while…” However, sentence structures are limited, and many sentences contain frequent errors that can make relationships between figures unclear. Examples include “the people spent time did households washing machine stood at 40 percentage” and “after one year it remain at 50 percentage”; these have faulty clause structure and verb forms. Tense and agreement are also inconsistent, as in “it remain,” “it climed,” and “this figure showed stabled trend.” Punctuation and spacing are unreliable, with long sentences joined by commas and missing spaces around figures. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and write shorter, complete sentences before attempting more complex comparisons.
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