Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart illustrate the chang in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of average weekly spend doing housework in households in one single country between 1920 to 2019 .

overall , it is clear inverse relationshipe between appliance ownership and domestic chores . while they three electrical appliance use of rise significantly over the country . and the household steadly decline .

in 1920 , washing machine were are most common appliances 40% , refrigerator appliances start 0% anf rose up 100% , while the vacuum cleaner start 30% and high

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the topic and make a relevant general observation about an inverse relationship between appliance ownership and housework time. However, the response addresses the task only minimally: it gives almost no usable comparison across the period and stops before describing the main trends. The statement that refrigerators rose to 100% is broadly consistent with the chart, but the text does not explain when this happened; “vacuum cleaner start 30% and high” is unfinished, and the washing-machine figures are not developed. The overview also says all three appliances rose steadily, although washing-machine ownership dipped around 1980. The response is 83 words, below the required 150, so it lacks the detail needed to summarise the charts. Include a complete overview and key figures for both charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview and then a detail sentence beginning “in 1920.” This gives the reader some sense of the intended progression. However, the response ends abruptly, so the information is not developed into a coherent summary, and the relationship between the two charts is not explained. The overview sentence is difficult to follow because it combines several incomplete clauses, while “while” does not clearly connect the ideas. Use separate, complete paragraphs for the introduction, overview and selected details, and connect comparisons explicitly—for example, contrast the rise in appliance ownership with the fall in housework hours.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “ownership,” “appliances,” “inverse relationship” and “domestic chores,” which shows an attempt to describe the charts rather than rely only on everyday language. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to interpret, such as “chang,” “steadly,” “anf” and “high.” Phrases such as “average weekly spend doing housework” and “they three electrical appliance use of rise” are not natural or clear. Aim for accurate chart language such as “the proportion of households owning…” and “hours spent on housework per week.” Proofreading spelling and choosing standard collocations would make your meaning more accessible.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few sentence forms, including an opening description and a contrast introduced with “while,” but control is weak and the range remains limited. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in “The chart illustrate,” “washing machine were are,” and “appliances start … and rose.” Articles and sentence boundaries are also problematic: “overall” begins an incomplete sentence, and the final detail sentence trails off without a complete clause. These errors frequently interrupt the reader’s understanding, even though the general topic can be recognised. Practise writing complete simple sentences first, checking subject–verb agreement and tense, then combine related information with accurate connectors. For example: “Refrigerator ownership rose from about 2% in 1920 to 100% by 1980.”

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