Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

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Student answer (Band 5.5)

These charts are very informative in sense of how machines make life easy and how housework hours reduced from 1920 to 2019.

In a first chart, we have information about ownership of 40% Washing machines, 0% Refrigerator and 30% Vacuum Cleaner, that people have in 1920. In second chart where we have information about number of hours of housework per week are 50 hours in 1920. When we compare both the charts, it shows when there are less machines, more hours need to spend for household work. But year by year when ownership of electrical appliances incresed number of hours of housework decresed. As we have information that in 1940s , 50 to 60 percentage houses have elecromic appliances and also when we check second chart, hours of housework per week are also decreased to 20.

In year 2019, 100% houses have elctronic appliances and housework hours per week are only 10.

So these two charts shows how time is saved by electronic appliances which people needs to spend on in housework per week.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response5.5
Coherence and Cohesion5.5
Lexical Resource5.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.0
Overall5.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad relationship between appliance ownership and housework time, and your comparison of the starting and ending years gives the reader a relevant overall message. However, the response only partly reports the main features of the charts. It gives little account of the different appliance trends: for example, refrigerators reached 100% by 1980, while vacuum cleaners rose to 100% by 2000; washing-machine ownership dipped slightly before increasing. Some figures are inaccurate or unclear: refrigerators were about 2%, not 0%, in 1920, and housework was about 20 hours in 1960, not 1940. The claim that all appliances were owned by 100% of households in 2019 also overlooks washing machines at about 75%. Select and compare key trends more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence, moving from the initial figures to a general comparison and then to 2019. Phrases such as “When we compare both the charts” and “In year 2019” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, the organisation is repetitive and does not develop a clear overview followed by well-grouped details. The two charts are discussed together in broad statements, so the reader cannot easily follow the separate appliance trends or the changes over time. Linking phrases such as “But year by year” and “also when we check” are used mechanically, and references such as “these two charts” do not clarify which specific data support the point. Use distinct paragraphs for the overview and key details, and connect comparisons more precisely.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “ownership,” “electrical appliances,” “housework hours,” and “decreased,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited, and several expressions are inaccurate or awkward, such as “machines make life easy,” “hours need to spend,” and “100% houses have electronic appliances.” Repetition of “information,” “charts,” and “housework” also makes the report less precise. There are noticeable spelling errors, including “incresed,” “decresed,” “elecromic,” and “elctronic,” which reduce clarity and control. Aim for concise data-reporting language and accurate collocations, for example, “the proportion of households owning…” and “weekly housework time fell.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences to compare the charts, including “When we compare both the charts, it shows…” and “when ownership … increased number of hours … decreased.” However, complex constructions are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the report difficult to read. Examples include “In a first chart,” “number of hours … are 50 hours,” and “which people needs to spend,” where articles, agreement, and sentence structure are not controlled. The final sentence also has an unclear construction: “time is saved … which people needs to spend on in housework.” Use shorter, complete sentences first, then practise accurate comparison structures such as “As ownership rose, weekly housework time fell.” Check subject–verb agreement and article use when editing.

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