Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts illustartes about the changes in owenership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

overall, the percentage of households with electrical appliances recored highest in 1980, 2000 and 2019 for refrigerator. While vacuum cleaner was showed highest in 2000 and 2019 and lowest in 1920 . Moreover in washing machine also recored maximum percentage of households in 2019.

In detail, washing machine showed the lowest percentage in 1920 with 40%. Whereas in 1940 the percentage of households slightly rose to 60 % in 1940. In year 1960 households steadily climbed to 70% in 1960. However, in 1980 the households marginally declined to near 60% . Then it rose the household percentage to 70% in 2000 and more in 2019.

In refrigerator it recored 0 % in 1920 and after that in 1940 the household escalated to above 50%. Moreover, the household sharply jumped to 90% in 1960. In the next year the percentage was surged to 100% in 1980 and stable the level for the next 2000 and 2019 years.

In Vacuum cleaner the household percentage was represtend 30% in 1920. After that it was fight to 50% in 1940. It showed that it rose the level with 20% in every year till 1980 and after that it significantly went up to 100% in year 2000 . In 2019 the percentage level was show no change in household.

Secondly, the number of hours of housework per week was recorded highest level per household in 1920 with 50 hours. After that it marginally reduced the hours to nearly 30 hours in 1940 and touch the 20 hours in 1960. In 1980 the housework per week dropped to near 10 hours and maintain the level for 2000. In 2019 the housework hours decreased to 10 hours per week.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover both charts and identify the broad contrast: appliance ownership generally rose while housework hours fell. You also include many relevant figures, such as washing machines at 40% in 1920 and refrigerators reaching 100% by 1980. However, the overview is unclear and does not accurately summarise the main pattern: refrigerators and vacuum cleaners, rather than all appliances, reached 100%, while washing machines peaked at 75% in 2019. Some details are inaccurate or imprecise: refrigerators were about 2%, not 0%, in 1920; washing machines dipped to 65% in 1980, not near 60%; and housework was 15 hours in 1980 and 2000, not near 10. A clearer overview and more precise comparisons would strengthen coverage.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview, separate appliance descriptions and a final paragraph on housework. This makes the information broadly easy to locate, and time markers such as “In 1940” and “In 2019” help show sequence. However, progression is sometimes mechanical, with repeated “After that” and “Moreover,” and several links are unclear or awkward, including “In the next year” for 1980 and “Secondly” when moving to the second chart. Some sentences combine several changes without clear relationships. Grouping the main trends more selectively and using precise comparisons between series would make the organisation more coherent and cohesion less repetitive.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of trend vocabulary, including “slightly rose,” “sharply jumped,” “marginally declined” and “stable,” which is appropriate for describing charts. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or unnatural, sometimes making the intended trend difficult to understand. For example, “the household escalated,” “it was fight to 50%,” and “it rose the level with 20%” do not express the data clearly. There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “illustartes,” “owenership,” “recored” and “represtend.” Use standard chart-reporting phrases consistently, such as “the proportion of households owning…” and “rose to,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some simple sentences and attempt longer structures with time clauses and contrast, for example, “However, in 1980…” and “After that…”. Nevertheless, the range is limited, and many sentences contain errors in verb forms, agreement or sentence construction. Examples include “the percentage … recored highest,” “the household sharply jumped,” and “the percentage was surged to 100%.” Several clauses are incomplete or joined awkwardly, as in “Whereas in 1940…” and “and stable the level.” Articles and prepositions are also inconsistently controlled. These errors can make relationships between the figures harder to follow. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and complete sentence patterns before adding more complex clauses.

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