Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graphs illustrate the change in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 120 and 2019.

Overall, the proportion of Refrigerator and Washing machine was significantly increased over the period, whereas Vacuum cleaner increased by 2019, despite some fluctuated between 1960 and 2000. In contrast, people had spent number of hours in household work was considerably declined by 2019.

In 1920, the percentage of households with electrical appliance was the lowest from Refrigerator at 0%, whereas it increased significantly to 90% by 1960. In 1980, it increased to 100% and remained stable, till 2019. Vacuum cleaner represented at 30% of electric usage in 1920, it hiked to 100% by 2000 and remained stable in the next two decades. Furthermore, the usage of Washing machine was at 40%, it rose to 70% by 1960. Despite some fluctuation between [redacted phone], it slightly recovered at 71% by 2019, which was lower than other Refrigerator and Vacuum cleaner.

In addition, the figure shown number of hours spent on housework during the week was the highest in 1920 at 50 hours, whereas it noticeable declined to 20 hours by 1960. It slightly reduced to roughly 8 hours by 1980, experiencing at 10 hours per week people spent on household work by 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both graphs and provide a clear overview: appliance ownership generally rose, while weekly housework time fell. You also select useful comparisons, including refrigerators reaching full household coverage and vacuum cleaners reaching 100% by 2000. Most reported figures are close to the chart, but the opening year is written as “120” rather than 1920, and the refrigerator starts at about 2%, not 0%. The housework figure is about 15 hours in 1980 and 11 in 2019, rather than roughly 8 and 10. The overview also overstates fluctuation in vacuum-cleaner ownership; its trend is consistently upward. More precise reporting of these details, alongside the useful broad trends already identified, would make the account more complete and accurate.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs describing appliance ownership and housework. This gives the reader a coherent overall route through the information, and transitions such as “Overall,” “In addition,” and “In contrast” help signal relationships. However, some links are awkward or unclear, particularly “Despite some fluctuation between 1980-2000” and “experiencing at 10 hours,” which make the sequence of changes harder to follow. The appliance paragraph also moves between series without consistently grouping or comparing them. To strengthen progression, organise the appliance trends in a clear order and use linking phrases only where they accurately describe the relationship between figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “remained stable,” “significantly,” and “declined,” and the meaning is generally understandable. There are also attempts at more formal trend language, such as “hiked” and “recovered,” but these are not always appropriate for describing the data: “hiked” is informal, while “recovered” suggests a prior fall that is not clearly shown. Several collocations and word forms are inaccurate, including “the proportion of Refrigerator,” “electric usage,” and “some fluctuated.” These choices limit precision even when the intended trend can be inferred. Aim for natural chart-description phrases such as “the percentage of households owning…” and “rose to,” and distinguish carefully between a rise, a fall, and a fluctuation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including contrast clauses with “whereas” and “despite,” and the overall meaning can usually be followed. However, grammatical control is uneven, and errors recur in sentence construction, verb forms, articles, and agreement. For example, “people had spent number of hours… was considerably declined” combines incompatible structures; “the figure shown number of hours” is also incomplete, and “it noticeable declined” lacks the required adverb form. The sentence beginning “Vacuum cleaner represented at 30%… it hiked…” joins two independent clauses with only a comma. Practise building complete clauses with accurate subjects and verbs, and check articles and verb forms. More reliable control of these patterns would make your varied sentence attempts clearer.

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