Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts depict the changes with the electrical machineries. also, the amount of time consuming of houseworks in one country's households between 1920 to 2019.

according to the given data the percentage of households with electrical technologies is moving upwords constantly. Although, in 1920 Washing machine has holding a significant percentage which is 40%, the other two appliances is having lower percentage comperativly. whereas the refrigerator has 0 percentage and the vacum cleaner is on 30 percent.

however,the washing machine percentage is growing with the quite faster in 1940 its on 60%, in 1960 it touched the 70% but in 1980 washing machine drop almost the 10 percent but 1980 onwards its moving upwords only in 2000 it reached to the70 percent and finally in the 2019 its moving towards the 80 percent.

on the other hand,the refrigerator starts with the zero in 1920 and jump on the 50% in 1940,in 1960 it reached the 90% in 1980 it reached the 100% from then it contain its percentage till 2019. subsequantly the vacum cleaner is holding 30% in 1920, 50% in 1940,70% in 1960, 90% in 1980 and 100% in 2000 which is maintained till 2019.

moreover, we have the chart given the hours of houswork per week. so in 1920 50 hours required for the housework per week in individual household and the its start moving downwards as 1940 it came to the 35 hours, in 1960 20 hours, in 1980 15 hours, and remain the same in 2000 then in 2019 10 hours per week

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You cover both charts and report many of the main figures, including the broad rise in appliance ownership and the fall in weekly housework. However, the overview is not sufficiently accurate or clear: you say appliance ownership is moving upwards “constantly,” although washing-machine ownership falls from about 70% to 65% between 1960 and 1980. Some figures are also misreported: the refrigerator starts at about 2%, not zero, and reaches roughly 55% in 1940 rather than 50%; the washing-machine figure in 2019 is about 75%, not simply “towards 80%.” The housework trend is described clearly, but the response mainly lists data rather than selecting and comparing the most important features. A concise, accurate overview would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a generally understandable order: it introduces the charts, discusses appliance ownership, and then turns to housework. The separate paragraphs for the appliances and the hours also help readers follow the two topics. This clear overall arrangement is a strength. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes weakened by mechanical or awkward linking, such as “Although” followed by “whereas,” and repeated transitions including “however,” “on the other hand,” and “moreover.” Some sentences run several years and figures together without clear punctuation, making comparisons harder to follow. To improve, use a distinct overview paragraph and group related trends, while choosing fewer, more precise connectors and separating each comparison into clear sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “percentage,” “reached,” “maintained,” and “moving downwards,” so the reader can identify the trends you intend to describe. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate enough to make parts of the report awkward: “electrical machineries,” “amount of time consuming,” and “washing machine has holding” do not express the intended ideas naturally. Spelling errors such as “vacum,” “comperativly,” and “subsequantly” also reduce precision. Aim for standard chart language and accurate forms, for example, “ownership of electrical appliances,” “time spent on housework,” and “the proportion rose.” This would make the description clearer and more appropriately formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to describe changes across several dates and use some longer sentences, but grammatical control is inconsistent. Errors in verb forms and agreement appear in phrases such as “Washing machine has holding,” “the other two appliances is having,” and “it contain its percentage.” Articles and sentence construction are also problematic, as in “in 1920 50 hours required” and “and the its start moving downwards.” These errors sometimes make the reader work to understand the relationships between figures. Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, particularly after sentence openings and around transitions. Practise accurate past-tense reporting—such as “ownership rose” and “housework fell”—and build longer sentences from correctly formed clauses.

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