Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The charts compare between ownership of three electrical appliance and amount of hours spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Overall, Although the growth of the Washing machine was inconsistent, the general trend is upward. Throughout the period the hours for housework dropped sharply.

Unlike the rest of electrical appliances, the Refrigerator had the roughest start with 0%. Compared to the other two electrical appliances, the Washing machine had the greatest, start with approximately 40%. And the Vacuum started with 30%.

By 1960 The order of the chart shifted dramatically, were the Refrigerator dominated the chart with approximately 90%. Whereas both of the Washing machine and the Vacuum cleaner, reached around 70%. The Refrigerator continued growing and reached 100% by 1980, and stayed there. Compared to the vacuum cleaner, the Washing machine had a drop and fell to just above 60%, but rose again, and by 2019 it reached just above 70%. Whereas the vacuum rose to 90% by 1980, and reached 100% by 2000 and stayed there.

Meanwhile, the hours of the housework were dropping gradually, it started with 50 hour per week. By 1960 it had already fallen to approximately 20 hours. And by 2019 it had dropped to only 10 hours.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You cover both charts and provide a clear overview: appliance ownership generally increased, while time spent on housework fell. The main comparisons are supported with relevant figures, including refrigerators reaching 100% by 1980 and vacuum cleaners reaching that level by 2000. Most reported values match the chart. One small factual inaccuracy is that refrigerators began at about 2%, rather than 0%; the washing-machine trend is also described as inconsistent without noting that it rose overall from 40% to 75%, despite a temporary dip. The housework figures are selected effectively, though the intermediate decline could be described more fully. A more precise overview and careful checking of the starting value would strengthen an otherwise well-focused summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph on appliance ownership and a final paragraph on housework. The sequence through the years is generally easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “By 1960,” “Meanwhile” and “Whereas” help connect comparisons. However, some connections are mechanical or awkward, particularly the repeated “Compared to” constructions and the sentence beginning “By 1960 The order of the chart shifted dramatically, were…”. The appliance paragraph also contains several short, fragmented statements, which interrupt the flow. Use clearer topic sentences and combine related comparisons into smoother sentences; ensure each contrast marker introduces a complete, logically connected clause.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing trends and comparisons, including “dominated,” “continued growing,” “fell” and “reached.” These choices make the main changes understandable. Some wording is imprecise or unnatural, however: “compare between ownership” is not a natural collocation, “the roughest start” is informal and unclear, and “the greatest, start” does not express the intended comparison accurately. “The order of the chart shifted” is also an awkward way to describe changes in appliance ownership. Aim for standard chart language such as “the proportion of households owning…” and “recorded the highest figure.” More precise collocations would make the account sound more controlled and help distinguish ownership levels from the amount of housework.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “although,” “whereas” and “compared to,” and the overall meaning is usually clear. Some grammatical errors remain, especially in sentence construction and punctuation. For example, “Although the growth of the Washing machine was inconsistent” is incorrectly capitalised and is joined to the overview with a comma; “By 1960 The order… were…” has faulty clause structure; and “it started with 50 hour per week” has errors in number and article use. Several sentence fragments beginning “And by…” also weaken accuracy. Practise forming complete clauses after linking words, checking singular/plural agreement and articles, and using full stops or semicolons rather than joining independent clauses with commas.

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