Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The two line charts illustrate the variations in buying electrical appliances and hours spent per week doing housework in households in one country from 1920 to 2019.

Overall, as the sales of home appliances increased, the time required to perform household works started decreasing. The sales of a refrigerator were increased most significantly even though a vacuum cleaner sales matched with the refrigerator eventually. There were slight fluctuation in a washing machine sales but it remained increasing over the period.

In 1920, the refrigerator stood at 0% while the vacuum cleaner were at 30% and the washing machine were at 40% in ownership. The refrigerator sales were rocketed to 100% till 1980. The vacuum cleaner showed a gradual increase to reach 100% in 2000 were it levelled off till 2019. However, the washing machine, started from the top with some fluctuations remained positively increasing and cummulated to more than 70% ownership.

While the electrical machines sales trend remained upward, the number of hours per week required for housework dropped drastically from 50 in 1920 to nearly 11 in 1980 where it pleaqued and dropped to 10 hours per week in 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You provide a clear overview of the main relationship: appliance ownership generally rose while housework time fell. You also identify the refrigerator’s sharp rise and the vacuum cleaner’s eventual 100% ownership, and include several relevant figures. This supports a well-focused response. However, some details are inaccurate or imprecise: the refrigerator reached 100% in 1980, not by that point as a general trend without noting its 2% starting level; housework fell to about 15 hours by 1980 and stayed there until 2000, rather than reaching its low in 1980 and then dropping to 10 in 2019. The washing-machine description also misses its dip around 1980. More precise reporting of these stages would make the account more fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response is organised into an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs, and the progression from the overall trends to appliance figures and housework is easy to follow. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “However,” and “While” help signal relationships between ideas. The comparisons are generally relevant, although the final paragraph’s contrast between appliance ownership and housework is not developed with the intermediate figures, and some references such as “where it pleaqued” make the sequence difficult to interpret. Aim for clearer links between each figure and its year, and group the appliance trends in a more systematic way. This would make the progression more consistently smooth and the cohesion less dependent on basic transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “fluctuation,” “gradual increase,” “levelled off,” and “dropped drastically,” which helps describe trends. There are also attempts at more expressive wording, such as “rocketed,” but some choices are inaccurate or unnatural in this context: “sales” is used where the chart shows household ownership, and “cummulated to more than 70% ownership” does not clearly express the final figure. “Household works” is also an awkward phrase. Spelling errors such as “pleaqued” and “cummulated” reduce accuracy. Use precise trend language and check spelling and collocations so that the vocabulary remains clear and appropriately formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast clause beginning “even though” and a time clause with “while.” Meaning is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “There were slight fluctuation” has a number-agreement error, while “the vacuum cleaner were” and “the washing machine were” use incorrect subject–verb agreement. The phrase “The refrigerator sales were rocketed” also has an incorrect verb construction, and “the number of hours … dropped … where it…” creates an unclear clause structure. Review agreement, articles and verb patterns, and make sure each sentence clearly identifies the subject and the time point. Greater accuracy across these structures would strengthen the response.

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