Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graphs gives the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country from 1920 to 2019.

Overall, households in 1920 washing machine

percentage was continue rose compere to all over electrical machine . while others housework between 2000 and 2019 dropped on hours per week.

To begin with, percentage of households with electrical appliances from 1920 to 2019 so many changes . in year 1940 washing machine reached a high of 60 percentage then from 2000 to 2019 steadily 60 percentage. addetionaly vacuum cleaner in year of 1920 is its 30 figure then households increased year 1960 to 2019 in proportion 100 it was fist highest compere to refrigerator in year of 1940 rocketed in 90 percentage .

Apart from this, number of house of housework per week per household between 1920 and 219 in 1920 hose work numbers was rose 50 hours per week that was highest number to all over while in year of 1940 they continue dropped. however in year of 2000 to 2019 numbers of house work hours was fell gradually .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad topic and include both appliance ownership and housework, and you note the overall decline in housework hours. However, the overview is unclear and does not accurately summarise the main patterns: appliance ownership generally rose, while housework time fell. Several figures and comparisons are misreported. For example, washing-machine ownership was about 75% in 2019, not a steady 60% from 2000 to 2019; vacuum-cleaner ownership reached 100% only in 2000, not 1960; and refrigerators reached 90% in 1960, not 1940. The housework figure was highest in 1920, but the later decline is not described precisely. Select the key trends and report the data accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs, and phrases such as “To begin with” and “Apart from this” signal a change of focus. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow because several trends and years are combined in unclear sequences. The overview sentence, “households in 1920 washing machine percentage was continue rose,” does not communicate a clear comparison, while the appliance paragraph moves between washing machines, vacuum cleaners and refrigerators without a consistent order. Some linking words, including “however,” do not clearly connect the ideas around them. Group the three appliance trends together in a logical sequence, then describe housework hours, using clear references to years and comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “ownership,” “housework,” “increased” and “dropped,” so the topic is recognisable. However, the range is limited and many word choices or combinations are inaccurate, making parts of the report hard to understand. Examples include “rocketed in 90 percentage,” “continue rose,” and “numbers of house work hours was fell gradually.” There are also spelling errors such as “compere,” “addetionaly” and “fist.” Use precise trend language and standard collocations, such as “rose to 90%,” “remained stable,” and “hours spent on housework declined.” Proofreading spelling and avoiding repeated, vague wording would improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form longer sentences and use time clauses, but control of sentence structure is inconsistent, and errors frequently make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “The graphs gives” has subject–verb disagreement, while “washing machine percentage was continue rose” has an incorrect verb construction. In “numbers of house work hours was fell gradually,” the subject and verb do not agree and the verb form is faulty. Articles and plural forms are also often missing or incorrect, as in “in year of 1940” and “number of house.” Most sentences rely on basic patterns, with complex clauses often breaking down. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build shorter, complete sentences before combining them.

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