Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line chart illustrate the how much percent of people had which type of electrical appliances between 1920 and 2019. The other chart shows how many hours were spent on housework.

Overall, it can be seen that washing machines and refrigerator are hold by large number of population and people spent maximum time in housework in 1920 which was decreased continuesly.

Looking at the chart in more details, first of all 30% population had vacuum cleaner and 40% population contain washing machine in 1920. Ownership of vacuum cleaner increased by 20% after 20 years till 1980 it was icreased by 10% in 2000 and after then stay stable till 2019. Ownership of refrigerator 0% in 1920, however, it was rised by 50% in 1940, 90% in 1960 and reached at 100% in 1980 which stay stable till 2019. The ownership of washing machine inclined till 1960 but it decreased by 10% in 1980 after then again inclined by 15% till 2019.

Moreover, people work 50 hours in 1920 and it was inclined by 15% in 1940. Furthermore, working hours in home decreased every year and reached at 10 hours per week in 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and identify the broad patterns: appliance ownership generally rose, while time spent on housework fell. Several key figures are reported accurately, including vacuum-cleaner ownership at 30% in 1920 and refrigerator ownership reaching 100% by 1980. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: refrigerator ownership was about 2%, not 0%, in 1920; vacuum-cleaner ownership reached 90% in 1980 and 100% in 2000, rather than increasing by 10% by 1980 and then remaining stable. The housework figure rose neither in 1940 nor by 15%; it fell from 50 to 35 hours. Your overview is relevant but could compare the appliances more precisely, especially the refrigerator’s early rise and the washing machine’s slight fluctuation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph about appliance ownership, and a final paragraph about housework. This makes the two charts easy to distinguish, and linking phrases such as “Overall,” “Moreover,” and “Furthermore” help signal progression. The organisation is coherent, though some connections are mechanical or do not accurately express the relationship between figures. For example, “after 20 years till 1980” makes the timeline difficult to follow, and “Furthermore” introduces a further trend without adding a clear contrast or development. Grouping the appliance trends more systematically and using precise time references would make the progression smoother and cohesion less dependent on formulaic transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for describing trends, including “increased,” “decreased,” “reached,” and “stable,” so the reader can generally understand the intended comparisons. However, the range and control are limited, with repeated or inaccurate expressions such as “inclined” for rising figures and “contain washing machine” for household ownership. Some word choices and spelling errors also reduce clarity, including “icreased,” “continuesly,” and “rised.” Use standard chart language consistently, and distinguish percentage points from percentages when describing changes. More precise nouns such as “households” and “ownership” would also help avoid the awkward phrase “population had” and make the report sound more appropriate for an academic data summary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the main message is usually understandable. However, errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and verb forms occur often enough to make some sentences awkward. For instance, “The line chart illustrate the how much percent” has subject–verb agreement and clause-formation problems, while “washing machines and refrigerator are hold” uses an incorrect passive form and mismatched number. In “Ownership of refrigerator 0% in 1920,” the sentence lacks a finite verb. Work on complete clauses, consistent past-tense reporting, and singular/plural agreement. A few carefully controlled complex sentences would improve grammatical range without sacrificing clarity.

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