Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line chart illustrate the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Overall trent the washing machine is showed Rise , refrigerator showed sharply increase Well the vacuum cleaner showig rose

Initially, in 1920 the value of washing machine was 40 percentage on the other side the value per week was 50 percentage in 1920, However Refrigerator value was 30 percentage in 1920 furthermore, the value of vacuum cleaner was 0 percentage in 1920

Next to thisIn 1940 and 2019 , The value of washing showed sharply incresed at the end of 2019 It was went upto 70 percentage but the minore fall showed in 1980 on the onther side in per week the value shower decrese. In addition Refigerator was showed rise end the end of 2019 it was went upto 100 percentage , Nonetheseless The value of vacuum cleaner showed repdily rise it was went upto 100 percentage in 2019

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the topic and mention broad upward trends in appliance ownership, but the response reports several key figures inaccurately: in 1920, refrigerators were at about 2%, not 30%, and vacuum cleaners were at 30%, not 0%. You also say washing-machine ownership reached 70% in 2019, whereas it was about 75%. The overview is incomplete: it does not clearly summarise the sharp fall in housework hours, from 50 to 11 per week, or the appliances’ differing patterns, including the washing-machine dip and the other appliances reaching full ownership. The response is also four words below the 150-word minimum; the 23 words copied from the task prompt do not count. Add an accurate overview and select the main comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response chronologically, beginning with 1920 and then moving to later years, and you use linking expressions such as “Overall,” “However,” and “In addition.” However, the progression is difficult to follow because several ideas are crowded into long, poorly punctuated sentences, and the relationship between the appliance figures and housework hours is often unclear. The opening overview is fragmented, while “concluetion the” leaves the final section unfinished. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and the main data, and group related trends rather than listing figures in a single sentence. Clear sentence boundaries and more precise links would make the information easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary includes relevant task terms such as “ownership,” “percentage,” “rise,” and “decrease,” so the reader can recognise the subject. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with “value” and “showed” used repeatedly instead of more precise language for describing trends. Several word choices or forms are inaccurate, including “Overall trent,” “minor fall showed,” and “repdily rise”; spelling errors such as “incresed” and “Nonetheseless” also reduce clarity. Aim to use a small set of accurate trend expressions and vary them appropriately—for example, describe a figure as increasing, declining, remaining stable, or reaching 100%. Check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences and uses time references, but grammatical control is inconsistent and the sentence structures are mostly simple or faulty combinations. For example, “The line chart illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “it was went upto 70 percentage” combines verb forms incorrectly. Articles and sentence construction are also problematic in phrases such as “the value of washing machine was 40 percentage.” Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, making sentence boundaries hard to identify. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then connect them with clauses such as “while” or “whereas.” Check subject–verb agreement, past-tense forms, articles, and punctuation in each sentence.

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