Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The diagam ilustrate the changes in ownership of electrical appliance and amount of time spent doing home work in household single country from 1920 to 2019.

In 1920 refrigerator going upward sharply.Then in 1940 refrigerater household use arrives approximately 55 percent.After 1940 the use of refrigerater start contineously and stop in 1960 and get percentage of 90 percent.So after a while house hold use speed has become slow in 1980 he approch 100 percent.after this from 1980 to 2019 his household maintain 100 percent .

The household rate of washing machine and vacuum cleaner.The washing machine and vacuum cleaner in 1920 40 percent and 30 percent use in household .Then washing maschine going upword smoothly and gain 60 percent on the other hand vacuum cleaner come upward 30 percent to 50 percent in 1940.After a while in 1960 washing machine rate has come up from 60 to70 percent and the vacuum cleaner going up from 50 to 70 percent .After that use of wahing mashine going up contineously and sto on 100 percent and in 1980 the vacuum clear going down from 70 percent to nearby 65 percent andand then going up word in 2000 and gain 70 percent again.after 2000 vacuum cleaner became and gain nearly 72 percent.

the use of refrigerater has the maximum and the use of vaccum cleaner has minimum.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the topic and report several relevant figures, including refrigerator ownership at about 55% in 1940 and 90% in 1960, as well as the initial washing-machine and vacuum-cleaner figures. However, the account is difficult to follow and contains major misreadings: refrigerators reached 100% by 1980, not 1960, and then remained there; washing machines did not rise to 100%, but ended at about 75%. You also reverse the vacuum-cleaner trend around 1980, and the final claim that it was the least-used appliance is inaccurate, since washing machines had the lowest ownership in 2019. The housework-hours series is not reported at all. A clearer overview of the main trends, with accurate comparisons across all four series, is needed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has some basic organisation: it begins with an introduction, then discusses refrigerators and the other appliances, and ends with a comparison. This gives the reader a rough sense of the intended structure. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and several transitions do not accurately connect the data. For example, “After a while” and “after this” are repeated without making the time sequence precise, while the long appliance paragraph shifts between washing machines and vacuum cleaners in a confusing order. The final comparison also conflicts with the figures described earlier. Use separate, clearly focused paragraphs, group related trends, and connect each year to the correct appliance and change.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to describing trends, such as “upward sharply,” “continuously,” “maximum,” and “percentage,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, word choice and spelling are frequently inaccurate or repetitive, and some phrases are hard to interpret, including “household use speed has become slow” and “the use … has the maximum.” Several appliance names are misspelled, such as “refrigerater,” “wahing mashine,” and “vacuum clear.” These errors weaken precision when reporting data. Build a reliable set of trend expressions and use them in natural combinations, such as “rose sharply,” “levelled off,” “remained stable,” and “accounted for the highest proportion.” Check spelling of key chart vocabulary before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You make attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “Then,” “After that,” and “on the other hand,” but most sentence patterns are simple or incomplete, and grammatical errors are frequent. Examples include “In 1920 refrigerator going upward sharply,” which lacks a finite verb and article, and “the use of refrigerater start contineously,” where the verb form does not agree with the subject. Tense and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “the vacuum clear going down … andand then going up word.” These problems sometimes make the intended relationship between events difficult to understand. Practise complete past-tense sentences with accurate subjects and verbs, and use full stops to separate each data point or comparison.

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