Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The charts illustrates the alteration in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of period spent doing housechores in one country between 1920 and 2019.their were 3 appliances which are washing machine,Refrigerator and vacuum cleaner.

Overall,the refrigerator percentage of housholds rose in 1920 to 1924 from 0 percentage upto 55%.After that its remain escalate throught out 1960 to 1980 and reaches to 99%.Futhermore toll 2019 it was plateau.

vacuum cleaner was 30% in 1920 and futher it was rose still 1980 apporximental 90% and then become steady till 2019 and unchanged.

However,washing machine was started from 40% comparatively higher then from other electrical appliances.increase approx 60% in 1940.futher it more accumulate and reaches to 70 % in 1960.In between 1960 to 1980 it fall 10%.and then again slightly rose till 2000. and increase till 2019 around 77%.In contrast to other the end value in 2019 was lower than other electrical appliances.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the three appliances and report several broad trends, including the refrigerator’s rise to full ownership and the decline in housework time. However, the response omits the housework series entirely, despite its prominent place in the task, and gives no overall comparison between appliance ownership and time spent on chores. Some figures and dates are also inaccurate: the refrigerator rose from about 2% in 1920 to 55% in 1940, not from 0% to 55% by 1924; it reached 100% by 1980. The washing-machine fall from 1960 to 1980 is about five percentage points, not ten. The response is 142 words, eight short of the 150-word minimum. Cover all series, give a clear overview, and check key values against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic sequence: an introduction, an overview-like paragraph about refrigerators, then comments on vacuum cleaners and washing machines. This gives the reader some sense of the chart’s categories, and transitions such as “Overall” and “However” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, there is no clear, balanced progression through the information: the housework data is absent, and the appliance descriptions are presented as separate fragments rather than organised comparisons. Several connectors are inaccurate or repetitive, including “Furthermore” and “In contrast,” which does not clearly establish the comparison intended. Use a concise overview followed by two logically grouped paragraphs, and connect comparisons explicitly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “plateau,” “steady,” and “increase,” so the reader can recognise that you are describing trends. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate enough to make parts difficult to interpret: “housechores,” “remain escalate,” “more accumulate,” and “futher it was rose” do not express the intended trends naturally. Spelling errors such as “housholds,” “Futhermore,” and “apporximental” are also noticeable. Aim for accurate, conventional trend language rather than forcing less familiar expressions: for example, say that a figure “rose,” “fell,” or “remained stable.” Check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences and use past-tense reporting, but most sentence patterns are simple, and errors are frequent enough to interrupt the flow. Examples include “The charts illustrates,” where the plural subject needs a plural verb, and “its remain escalate,” which has an incorrect verb form. The sentence beginning “washing machine was started” also has an awkward passive construction, while “in 1920 to 1924” uses an incorrect time relationship. Missing spaces after full stops and inconsistent punctuation further affect readability. Practise accurate past-tense clauses and comparisons, such as “Refrigerator ownership rose from about 2% in 1920 to 55% in 1940,” and separate each complete sentence with correct punctuation.

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