Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart to demonstrate the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households on one country between 1920 to 2019

Overview, the heights ownership to electical amount spent by the vacuum cleaner highest growth them in construte refrigerator and washing machine to the lowest growth least manufacturing County in 1920 to 2019 them.

The at the beening heights number of House works is vacuum cleaner in increasing 30 percentage to100 percentage increase them.

then, source refrigerator is 1970 to 2020 by constructed is 0 percentage to 100 percentage increase them.

then, growsubstantially to least percentage of 40 percentage to 70 above by the increasing by them . declined by the changes of ownership of electrical appliances between housework period 1920 to 2019.

meanwhile, the slightly increased in per hour in time period of 1920 is 50% of the them then 1940 is the balanced distribution of 1940 is 30% decrease by them. then number of hourse per week is 1960 is 20% gradually declined to them.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the two broad subjects—appliance ownership and housework time—and include a few relevant figures, such as vacuum-cleaner ownership rising from 30% to 100% and housework falling from 50 hours in 1920 to 20 in 1960. However, the overview is difficult to interpret and does not accurately summarise the main patterns. The refrigerator began at about 2%, not zero, and reached 100% by 1980; the response instead gives an unclear period of “1970 to 2020.” It also says washing-machine ownership grew from 40% to “70 above,” missing the final figure of about 75% and its fluctuations. The housework trend is only reported through 1960, omitting its later decline to 11 hours. Select the key trends and compare them accurately in a clear overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to separate an overview from details, and sequencing words such as “then” and “meanwhile” show an effort to connect information. However, the ideas are not arranged into a clear progression: the overview is followed by a paragraph that mixes appliance figures, unclear time periods and housework data. Repeated “then” does not make the relationships between points clear, and phrases such as “the at the beening heights number” make it hard to identify what is being described. Organise the response into a clear overview and separate detail paragraphs—for example, one for appliance ownership and one for housework hours. Use linking expressions only where they accurately show a comparison or change.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “ownership,” “percentage,” “declined” and “per week,” so the topic is recognisable. However, vocabulary is basic and often inaccurate or repetitive, which strains understanding. Phrases such as “heights ownership,” “least manufacturing,” “balanced distribution” and “growsubstantially” do not express the intended chart trends clearly; “manufacturing” is especially unsuitable for describing household ownership. There are also spelling and word-form problems, including “electical,” “hourse” and “beening.” Build a small set of precise trend expressions and use them consistently, such as “the proportion of households owning,” “rose steadily,” “reached a peak” and “fell gradually.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response attempts to report changes over time and uses some simple clauses, but sentence structures are very limited and frequent errors often obscure the intended meaning. For example, “The chart to demonstrate…” is a sentence fragment, while “the heights ownership to electical amount spent” lacks a clear grammatical structure. Tense and verb patterns are also unreliable in phrases such as “is increasing” and “by constructed,” and articles, prepositions and sentence boundaries are often missing or misplaced. Practise writing complete subject–verb sentences, such as “Refrigerator ownership rose from about 2% in 1920 to 100% in 1980.” Then check each sentence for a clear subject, accurate verb tense and punctuation.

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