Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given graph lines show that the percentage of use of households like home appliances like Washing machine, Refrigerator and vacuum cleaner which were used in homes to daily use from ( 1920 - 20219)

In 1920, the usage of Refigerator was nothing it means that no one use refrigerator beacuse it was not invented yet. It was invented in 1940, after its invention the perentage of people who used Refrigerator was 52%. In 1960 the percentage of people who used Refrigerator was rose from 52% to 90% which was the rose of 38% between 1940 to 1960. In next 20 years the usage of Refrigerator was rose to 100% because it became the most important home appliances and from 1980 to 2019 its graphs showed thats it usage was still on 100% in every home.

The black ploted lines shows the usage of washing machine from 1920 to 2019. In the start of 1920 the percenatge pf people who washing machine was 40% beacuse no one knew about its importance and in the coming 20 years its rose to 60% which was rose of 20% people who used washing machine.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies some relevant appliance trends, especially the refrigerator’s sharp rise and the washing machine’s increase from 40% to 60% by 1940. However, it does not provide a clear overview of the main features, and coverage is very incomplete: the vacuum cleaner and the housework-hours series are not reported, while the washing-machine account stops after 1940. Some claims are also unsupported or inaccurate: the chart shows refrigerator ownership at about 2% in 1920, not none, and it does not establish when the appliance was invented or why ownership rose. To improve, summarise the overall patterns first, then compare all three appliances and the decline in housework time using the chart’s figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic organisation: the response begins with an introduction and then discusses the refrigerator before moving to the washing machine. Time markers such as “In 1920,” “In 1960” and “In next 20 years” help the reader follow parts of the account. However, the progression is incomplete and uneven, with no concluding overview and no paragraph or transition covering the remaining series. Repeated phrasing such as “the percentage … was” and “usage … was rose” makes connections mechanical rather than smooth. Grouping the information into an overview and two focused comparison paragraphs, and using clearer links such as “By contrast” or “Meanwhile,” would make the report easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “usage,” “appliances” and “invented,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, word choice and spelling are often inaccurate or repetitive: “percentage of use of households” is an awkward way to describe ownership, and “the usage … was rose” does not express the trend naturally. There are also misspellings such as “Refigerator,” “perentage” and “percena[t]ge,” which reduce precision. Avoid repeating “usage” and “rose”; use accurate chart language such as “the proportion of households owning,” “increased,” “reached” and “remained stable.” Check spelling and collocations before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts longer sentences and uses time clauses, for example, “In 1960 the percentage … was rose from 52% to 90%,” showing an effort to describe change across periods. However, sentence structures are often faulty, and errors frequently make the account less clear. Examples include “the percentage of use of households,” “the percentage of people who used Refrigerator was rose,” and “the people who washing machine was 40%,” where clause structure, verb forms and missing grammatical elements interfere with meaning. Articles, plurals and punctuation are also inconsistent. Practise simple, accurate comparison patterns first—for example, “Refrigerator ownership rose from about 55% in 1940 to 90% in 1960”—then combine them with a small number of correctly formed complex sentences.

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