Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given liner illustration for regarding the information of households in one country between froem 1920 to 2019.The data calibrate in percentage.

Overall, it is vivid that the view point of housework in household in 1920 had 0% minimum and the maximam in year 2019 had 100% doing housework in household.

As it can be seen that in year 1920 had 0% refrigertor and 30% vacuum besides,40% washing machine in the same year.Furthermore,in the year 1940 washing machine had 60% and refrigerator had dicline 10% in the same year additional,Vacuum cleaner had half percentage as compare to washing machine.Moreover,in the year 1960 washing machine had 70% and Refrigerator had been increased to 90% and Vacuum cleaner had samiliarly as compare to washing machine in year 1960.

Moving toward further detail in the year 1980 almost 60% washing machine doing in housework on top of that,Refrigerator 100%.At last in year 2019 had vacuum cleaner 100% up.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies several appliance figures and attempts an overview, but the main trend is substantially misreported: housework did not rise from a minimum of 0% to 100%; it fell from 50 hours per week in 1920 to 11 in 2019. This confuses the hours series with appliance ownership and leaves the most important overall comparison inaccurate. Some appliance details are also wrong or unclear: refrigerators rose from about 2% to 55% by 1940, rather than declining to 10%, and washing-machine ownership was about 65% in 1980, not “almost 60%.” The response does mention the rise in refrigerator and vacuum-cleaner ownership, but omits the steady decline in housework and gives no clear, accurate overview of the chart’s key patterns.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, an attempted overview, and two detail paragraphs. The chronology also gives the appliance information some progression, and linking expressions such as “Furthermore” and “Moreover” show an effort to connect points. However, the overview is not a reliable guide to the details, and the final paragraph ends abruptly after one brief point. Connections between figures are sometimes unclear—for example, “Vacuum cleaner had half percentage as compare to washing machine” does not clearly state the values or comparison. Several transitions are mechanical or awkward, so the reader must work to follow the intended relationships. Group the main trends first, then compare the series with clear references and complete sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “increased,” “decline,” and the appliance names, and it attempts to describe change over time. However, word choice and spelling errors frequently make the meaning unclear: “liner illustration,” “data calibrate,” “view point,” “refrigertor,” and “samiliarly” are examples. Several phrases are not natural for describing charts, such as “100% doing housework in household” and “washing machine doing in housework.” Use precise terms such as “the proportion of households owning…” and “hours spent on housework.” Also distinguish ownership percentages from hours per week; accurate vocabulary for each measure would make the comparisons much clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts longer sentences and uses time clauses and linking phrases, but sentence structure is often incomplete or difficult to interpret. For example, “As it can be seen that in year 1920 had 0% refrigerator” lacks a clear subject and has an awkward clause structure; “in the year 1980 almost 60% washing machine doing in housework” has no correctly formed main verb. Articles and prepositions are also frequently missing or misplaced, as in “in year 2019” and “compare to washing machine.” Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and full stops. Build each comparison around a clear subject and verb—for example, “Refrigerator ownership rose to 55% in 1940”—and check tense, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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