Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given line graphs illustrate the changes in the percentage of households who owned three type of electrical appliances and the number of hours spent in houseworks in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Overall, it can be clearly seen that that all three electrical appliances ownership incresed over the period. And number of hours of housework decresed significantly.

According to the given first line graph in 1920, that 40% individuals owned washing machine as compared with 30% owned vacuum cleaner. The ownership of refrigerator absent at that time. between 1940 and 2019 the ownership of refrigerator dramatically increased and reached 100% at the end of the period. the ownership of maching machine increased but showed less growth and reached just approxiamtely 73%. While the sale of vacuum cleaner increased significantly and reached 100% in 2019.

Regarding housework, household spent 50 hours per week to doing their housework. This number of hours decresed with the passage of time and reached just 15 hours spent to perform thier house work in 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main overall patterns: appliance ownership generally rose, while time spent on housework fell. You also include useful comparisons, such as washing machines at 40% versus vacuum cleaners at 30% in 1920, and note that refrigerators and vacuum cleaners reached full household ownership by the end. This gives the response a relevant overview and coverage of both graphs. However, some details are incomplete or inaccurate: refrigerator ownership was about 2% in 1920, rather than simply absent, and housework fell to 11 hours in 2019, not 15; 15 hours applies to 1980 and 2000. The washing-machine trend also dipped in 1980 before rising again, a notable feature worth reporting. More precise selection and reporting of these details would strengthen the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for appliance ownership and housework. The sequence is generally easy to follow, and phrases such as “Overall” and “Regarding housework” help signal shifts in focus. This coherent arrangement is a strength. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. The sentence beginning “And number of hours…” is an awkward continuation of the overview, while “According to the given first line graph in 1920, that…” does not clearly connect its opening phrase to the main clause. The appliance paragraph also moves through several years without consistently anchoring each comparison. Use complete, direct topic sentences and clearer time markers to make progression smoother and cohesion less noticeable.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “ownership,” “increased,” “reached,” and “per week,” so the main trends are usually understandable. There is also some attempt to vary wording, for example “decreased significantly” and “reached 100%.” However, the range and control are limited, with repeated use of “increased” and “reached,” and several inaccurate or unnatural expressions. “The ownership of refrigerator absent” and “the sale of vacuum cleaner” do not describe the chart accurately in natural English; the graph shows household ownership, not sales. Spelling errors such as “incresed,” “decresed,” and “approxiamtely” are noticeable. Build a more precise set of trend and comparison phrases, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more developed sentences, including a comparison with “as compared with” and a contrast introduced by “While.” However, control is uneven, and errors in sentence formation and grammatical patterns sometimes make the meaning less clear. For example, “According to the given first line graph in 1920, that 40% individuals owned…” has an unnecessary “that” and an incomplete construction; “household spent 50 hours per week to doing” combines incompatible verb patterns. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and agreement, as in “three type” and “the ownership of refrigerator.” The overview contains a repeated “that,” and sentence-initial “And” creates a fragment-like connection. Practise complete clauses, article use, and consistent verb patterns, then proofread punctuation and sentence boundaries.

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