Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graphs illustrate how the ownership of electrical appliances changes and how much time spent doing housework in household in a country from

Overall, the percentage of ownership showed upward trend, whereas number of hours per week experinced downward trend over the given period.

In 1920, there were about 40%1920 to 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies two relevant overall patterns: appliance ownership generally increased, while weekly housework declined. However, it does not provide a usable summary of the charts. The only attempted detail, “about 40%1920 to 2019,” is incomplete and does not clearly identify which appliance the figure refers to; the remaining figures and comparisons are absent. The opening sentence is also unfinished, so the task’s key information is not communicated. The response contains 53 words, below the required 150, which leaves the task substantially incomplete. To improve, write a complete overview and select several accurate comparisons, such as refrigerators reaching 100% by 1980 while housework fell from 50 to 11 hours per week.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview and then a detail sentence. The overview also uses “whereas” to contrast the two broad trends. However, the progression breaks down because the opening sentence ends at “from,” and the final sentence is an incomplete, confusing fragment: “In 1920, there were about 40%1920 to 2019.” As a result, the reader cannot follow the intended detail or see a developed sequence of comparisons. Use complete sentences, separate the introduction, overview and data details into clear paragraphs, and connect each comparison explicitly to its year and category.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some appropriate task vocabulary, including “line graphs,” “ownership,” “electrical appliances,” “upward trend” and “downward trend.” These choices show awareness of the topic and allow the broad overview to be understood. However, the range is very limited because the response is so short, and there is little vocabulary for comparing figures or describing changes over time. “Experinced” is misspelled, and “ownership of electrical appliances changes” is less precise than describing the percentage of households owning each appliance. Build a wider set of accurate terms such as “rose,” “remained stable,” “reached,” and “declined,” and use them with the relevant appliance and year.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a complex contrast in “Overall, the percentage of ownership showed upward trend, whereas number of hours per week…” This demonstrates some ability to link clauses, but article use is inaccurate: “showed upward trend” needs “showed an upward trend,” and “whereas number” needs “whereas the number.” The first sentence is unfinished after “from,” while the final sentence combines “40%” and “1920 to 2019” without a grammatical structure that explains the relationship. These incomplete constructions make the message difficult to interpret. Use complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and check articles and sentence boundaries before finishing.

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