Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The ectrical appliances in my country is very good And this appliances is very nice percentage and doesn't low the percentage And the washing machine is 40 percentage in 1920 and more percentage day by day and the. percentage of washing machine in 1940 is 60 percentage and the more percentage day by day in the washing machine come 70 percentage in 1960 and the price of Washing machine low in 1980 and 62 percentage and the percentage of washing machine in more than 70 in 2000 and the day by day more percentage in 73 and don't low the percentage of washing machine And the next of the refrigerator is don't used in household 1920 in 0 percentage of refrigerator used and 1940 is the very fast speed in the used of household in 50 percent and the refrigerator is mor then percentage in day by dayin 1960 the percentage of refrigerator used in household in 80 and 1980 is the percentage of refrigerator in 100 and the percentage of the refrigerator is more than day by day and the next of the vacuum cleaner is ised of the house hold in 1920 is 30 percentage and the vacuum cleaner in very fast day by day more than percentage and this percentage of vacuum cleaner in 1940 in 50 percentage and the very fast speed in the vacuum cleaner used in house hold day by day and the percentage of 1960 in vacuum cleaner is more then 80 percent used in house hold and 1980 to 2019 the used of vacuum cleaner in hosehold in 100 percent used ad this appliances is very good and work is very easy in this appliances

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the three appliances and reports several relevant figures, including washing-machine ownership at 40% in 1920 and 60% in 1940, and refrigerator ownership reaching 100% by 1980. However, it does not summarise the main overall patterns: refrigerators and vacuum cleaners rose to near-universal ownership, while housework hours fell substantially. The second chart is omitted entirely, so an important part of the task is not addressed. Some figures are also inaccurate: the refrigerator was about 2%, not 0%, in 1920; its 1940 figure was about 55%, not 50%; and vacuum-cleaner ownership was about 70%, not above 80%, in 1960. Focus on accurate key comparisons and include both charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is some sequence in the response: it discusses washing machines first, then refrigerators, and finally vacuum cleaners. This gives the reader a basic sense of which appliance is being described. However, the ideas are presented in one long, largely unbroken paragraph, with repeated phrases such as “day by day” and “the percentage … used in household.” The frequent use of “and” does not clearly show how points relate, and several sentences become difficult to follow. The response also lacks an overview and does not separate the main trends from supporting details. Use distinct paragraphs for an overview and the key comparisons, and connect information with precise transitions such as “by contrast” or “thereafter.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The response uses a small set of task-related words, including “percentage,” “washing machine,” “refrigerator,” and “vacuum cleaner,” so the reader can identify the subject. However, vocabulary is highly repetitive and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “more percentage day by day,” “very fast speed in the used,” and “the price of Washing machine low,” where the chart shows ownership rather than price. Spelling and word-form errors, including “ectrical,” “mor then,” and “ised,” also reduce clarity. Build a more precise range for describing trends and proportions, for example “increased,” “declined,” “reached,” and “the proportion of households owning.” Check spelling and use standard collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response attempts to report figures in simple clauses, but grammatical control is inconsistent. Errors in agreement and sentence structure appear in examples such as “The ectrical appliances in my country is very good” and “this appliances is very nice percentage.” Articles and prepositions are often missing or misplaced, as in “used in household 1920,” while repeated clauses joined by “and” create run-on sentences. There is little variety in sentence forms, and punctuation does not reliably mark sentence boundaries. These problems sometimes make relationships between figures and trends unclear. Practise accurate simple sentences first, such as “Ownership rose from 40% in 1920 to 60% in 1940,” then combine them using controlled clauses and appropriate punctuation.

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