Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given charts illustrates the data of changes in ownership of electrical products and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one nation between 1920 and 2019

In the year 1920 the percentage of refrigerator was 0 and after in the year 1940 and 1960 the percentage was somewhere rose between 50-60 and 90 respectively., the number of vacuum cleaner which households was 30 percentage in the year 1920 and it steadily rising from 1940 to 2000 and its percentage was 50 and 90 respectively ., 40 percentage of washing machine which households it in the year 1920. Secondly, according to the analysis there is drop in the numbers of washing machine in the year 1980 and it was somewhere between 60 to 70. However, it gets increased in the 2000 and 2019 and the percentage was 60 and 75.

Secondly the number of hours of housework per week per household was 50 percent in the year 1920 and it gets decreased . according to the data it is observed that the numbers were decreased by the year 1980 and from the year 1980 to 2019 the number of hours of house activity was fluctuated and in the year 2019 the percentage was 10 .

Overall . the ownerships of all three electrical appliances were increased and the number of hours of housework per week per household was decrease over the period

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the overall direction correctly: ownership of the appliances generally rose, while housework time fell. You also report several relevant figures, including vacuum-cleaner ownership at 30% in 1920 and washing-machine ownership at 75% in 2019. However, coverage is partial and some details are inaccurate or unclear. Refrigerator ownership was about 2% in 1920, not 0%, and reached 100% by 1980; the response does not report this important endpoint. The housework figure is hours, not a percentage, and it declined from 50 to 11 hours, rather than fluctuating after 1980. The overview is useful but broad, and the main comparisons need clearer, more accurate support. The response meets the required length; 11 words copied from the task prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some organisation: the first main paragraph discusses appliance ownership, the next turns to housework, and a final sentence gives an overall summary. This helps readers recognise the two chart topics. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow because several figures and trends are packed into long, loosely connected sentences. Repeated use of “Secondly” does not clearly signal the relationship between points, and phrases such as “according to the analysis” add little connection. The sequence of years is sometimes unclear, particularly in the housework paragraph. Use separate sentences to compare appliances, group related trends, and use precise links such as “By contrast” or “Meanwhile” only where they express a real relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “ownership,” “increased,” and “decreased,” so the main subject is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing data. “The percentage of refrigerator” and “the number of vacuum cleaner” do not name the measured category clearly, while “house activity” is an imprecise substitute for housework. Repetition of “percentage” also leads to a factual mismatch when describing hours. Aim for accurate collocations such as “the proportion of households owning a refrigerator” and “hours spent on housework.” More varied verbs for trends and comparisons would make the report clearer and more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to combine information using clauses, for example, “the number of hours … was 50 … and it gets decreased,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in agreement and sentence construction appear in “The given charts illustrates” and “40 percentage of washing machine which households it.” Tense shifts between past reporting and present forms, as in “it gets decreased,” also make the timeline less controlled. Articles and plural forms are often missing, and punctuation is unreliable, with full stops and commas placed awkwardly around “respectively.” These problems sometimes make relationships between figures difficult to understand. Build a reliable base with complete past-tense sentences, then add comparisons using accurately formed clauses.

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