Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graphs illustrate the change in ownership of electrical products and amount of time spent doing housework in one nation among 1920 to 2019 .

Overall it is clear that , electrical appliance like refrigerator and vocuum cleaner demonstrated higher proportion , while useing washing machine shows flactuetion over the period . Additionaly working in house shows high rates of hours per week initially , however at the end of the year it declined .

In 1920 useing wasing machine , refrigaretor , vacuum cleaner had about 40% , 30% and 0 % of households , but after 2 decades it increased sharply around owing refrigaretor rose 90% households while owing washing machine and vaccum cleaner had similar proportion about 70% . Then after a deceds owing refrigaretor and vacuum cleaner increased about 10 % and 30% from the last decades , but washing machine owing rates fall down about 62 % . Then At the end year 2019 refrigaretor and vaccum cleaner owning rates remain same at the past and owing washing machine rates slighty incresed about 75% .

The house work including washing clothes , preparing meals ,cleaning had higher working hours about 50 hours per week in 1920 , however after deceads it declined about 35 hours . then at last decads in2019 it sherply fall down about 10 hours per week .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and give a relevant overview: appliance ownership generally rose, while weekly housework fell. Several key figures are reported accurately, including washing machines at about 40% initially and 75% in 2019, and housework declining from 50 to around 10 hours. However, some central comparisons are unclear or inaccurate. In 1940, the refrigerator figure was about 55%, not 90%, and the figures for washing machines and vacuum cleaners were about 60% and 50%, rather than both around 70%. The refrigerator reached 90% in 1960. You also omit the housework values for the middle years, including its plateau at about 15 hours from 1980 to 2000. More precise reporting of these stages would make the account more complete and clear.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph on appliance ownership and a final paragraph on housework. This gives the reader a coherent overall arrangement, and time markers such as “In 1920,” “after 2 decades” and “at the end” help signal sequence. However, the appliance paragraph moves through several years in long, crowded sentences, making comparisons difficult to follow. Some links are also mechanical or unclear, particularly “Then after a deceds” and “Then At the end year.” Grouping the appliance trends more clearly—for example, describing the refrigerator and vacuum cleaner together, then noting the washing-machine fluctuation—would improve progression. Use consistent, accurate time references and clearer sentence boundaries.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “ownership,” “proportion,” “declined” and “per week,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range and control are limited by repeated or inaccurate expressions such as “owing” for ownership, “working in house” for housework, and “rates fall down.” There are also many spelling errors, including “vocuum,” “flactuetion,” “refrigaretor” and “slightly” misspelled as “slighty.” These errors sometimes make the reader pause, and several phrases do not sound natural in an academic report. Aim for precise chart language and check spelling carefully; use verbs such as “rose,” “fell” and “remained stable” rather than repeatedly using “increased” or “rates.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “however” and a relative clause in “house work including washing clothes, preparing meals, cleaning.” The overall meaning can usually be recovered, but some sentence structures are faulty or incomplete. For example, “among 1920 to 2019” uses an incorrect preposition pattern, while “Then after a deceds owing refrigerator and vacuum cleaner increased…” lacks a clear grammatical structure. Articles, plurals and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “at the end year 2019” and the spacing around commas and full stops. Build shorter, complete sentences first, then add comparisons using accurate clauses. Check verb forms and sentence boundaries so that each trend has a clear subject and verb.

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