Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The charts illustrate the percentage of households who has electrical appliances and time spent doing housework in households in a specific country between 1920 and 2019.

Looking at the details, In 1920, 40% of households had washing machine, while this proportion rose gradually and reached 70% in 1960. The trend slightly fell and recorded under 70% in 1980. After that the figure increased and accounted for over 70% at the end of the time period. Meanwhile, vaccum cleaner was at 30% in 1920. Thereafter, there was sharply increase and represented 100% in 2000. Then the percentage stay stablized at the end of the time. In contrast, the refrigerator was at the lowest proportion among all in 1920. However, the was a dramatically rise and accounted for 90% in 1960 and after that it reached 100% in 1980, in the following years, it was stay at 100%.

The number of hours of housework was at 50 per week. Thereafter the figure declined sharply and recorded at 20 hourse in 1960. After that the trend followed the decline pattern and steadily fell. In 2019, it was recorded at 10 hourse per week.

Overall, The percentage of electronic appliance experienced rise. However, the percentage of washing machine was the highest in the beginning and at the end it was represent the lowest proportion among all. However, other two appliances recorded at same percentage in 2019. Time spent doing housework in households experienced decline over the period of time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and identify the main overall patterns: appliance ownership generally rose, while housework hours fell. Several key figures are accurately reported, including washing machines at 40% in 1920 and 70% in 1960, refrigerators reaching 100% in 1980, and housework declining to about 20 hours in 1960. The overview also notes that refrigerators and vacuum cleaners ended at the same level. Some details, however, are imprecise or incomplete: the refrigerator starts at about 2%, not merely “the lowest proportion,” and the final washing-machine figure is about 75%, rather than just “over 70%.” The overview’s claim that washing machines were the highest at the beginning is inaccurate; they were highest, but the comparison should be stated clearly. More precise comparisons and a fuller summary of the contrasting trends would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph describing appliance ownership, a paragraph on housework, and a concluding overview. This makes the information easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Meanwhile,” “In contrast,” and “After that” help signal comparisons and changes over time. However, the overview appears at the end rather than near the beginning, and some transitions are repetitive or awkward, particularly the repeated use of “After that” and “However.” The appliance paragraph also moves between series without consistently grouping the most useful comparisons. Place a concise overview immediately after the introduction, then organise the details into clear comparisons—for example, the two appliances that reached full ownership and the washing-machine fluctuations. This would make progression more deliberate and cohesion less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of trend vocabulary for this task, including “rose gradually,” “declined sharply,” “reached,” and “stabilized,” so the main changes are generally understandable. There are also attempts at more formal reporting language, such as “accounted for” and “proportion.” However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “percentage of electronic appliance” does not fit the chart, “represented 100%” is awkward for a data point, and “the trend followed the decline pattern” is unnecessarily vague. Spelling errors such as “vaccum,” “stablized,” and “hourse” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise chart language such as “the share of households owning…” and “stood at,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “while,” “whereas” in effect through contrast, and “after that.” Most of the intended meaning remains clear, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “households who has” has an agreement and relative-pronoun problem, while “the was a dramatically rise” contains errors in article use and word form. Verb forms are also inconsistent in “it was stay at 100%” and “it was represent the lowest proportion.” Punctuation is sometimes weak where clauses run together, as in the refrigerator sentence beginning “and after that.” Practise accurate past-tense reporting and subject–verb agreement, and separate long sentences with appropriate punctuation. Greater control of these patterns would make your varied sentence forms more reliable.

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