Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graphs compare precentage of households with electrical appliances and number of hours washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning per week per washing mashine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner recpectively in a country between 1920 to 2019.

Overall, the use of refrigerator and vacuum was highest by the end 2019, Although the use of refrigerator in 1920 was almost nill.On the other hand the use of washing machine had vaiable trend during 1920 to 2019.Mean-while the use these appliances declined over this years.

The ownership of refrigerator show dramatic increase, as in 1920 it almost no one own it, while after it reach 100% ownership in 2000 and remain stable by the end of 1920. As the ownership of vacuum cleaner in 1920 was 30% at reach 100% in 80 years.On the other hand ownership of washing was highest in 1920 of almost 40% and increase 70% in 1960 but after two decade its ownership reduce to 65% and then nest 40 year there was in of almost 8%.

On the other side working with electrical appliance per week show decreasing trend, Although in 1920 it was highest of 50 hours per week and decline to almost 10 hous per week by the end of 2019.Overall the decrese was about 40 hours per week in a century.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad contrast between rising appliance ownership and falling housework hours, and include several relevant figures, such as refrigerators reaching 100% and housework declining from 50 hours. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: “the use these appliances declined” contradicts the ownership trends, and the washing-machine trend is described as variable without clearly summarising its overall rise. Some details are also misreported or confusing: refrigerators reached 100% in 1980, not 2000, and the final washing-machine increase is not clearly stated. The response therefore covers the charts only partially. To strengthen it, give a concise, accurate overview of the main trends, then select key comparisons and report the figures consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and paragraphs describing the appliance data and housework hours. This gives the reader some organisation, and phrases such as “On the other hand” signal contrast. However, progression is weakened by unclear or contradictory links: “Meanwhile the use these appliances declined” does not fit the preceding trend, and “On the other side” introduces the housework data awkwardly. Several ideas are crowded into long sentences, while punctuation and spacing make boundaries difficult to follow. Organise the details into clearer groups—for example, refrigerators and vacuum cleaners together, then washing machines and housework—and use linking expressions only where the relationship is accurate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “ownership,” “dramatic increase,” “stable,” and “decline,” which helps communicate the broad trends. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling and collocation errors make parts difficult to interpret: “precentage,” “nill,” “vaiable,” and “working with electrical appliance” are examples. “Use” is also repeated where “ownership” or “proportion of households” would be more precise. Some phrases, such as “the use of refrigerator,” are not natural for describing household ownership. Build a more accurate set of chart-description expressions and check spelling and word forms carefully; this would make your comparisons clearer and more appropriate to an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple statements and longer clauses, including comparisons introduced by “while” and “although.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some meanings difficult to follow. For example, “The ownership of refrigerator show” has subject–verb agreement and article problems, while “after it reach 100% ownership” has an incorrect verb form. The sentence beginning “As the ownership of vacuum cleaner…” is also incomplete or incorrectly joined to the next clause. Work on consistent past-tense reporting, agreement, articles and sentence boundaries. Shorter, complete sentences would help you express the data accurately before you attempt more complex comparisons.

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