Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The charts illustrate the changes that are made in the perecentage of households which own three electrical appliances that are: washing machines, refrigerators and vacuum cleaners, and also the changes in the number of hours spent while doing housework in households in one country between the period of 99 years ([redacted phone]).

Overall, the percentage of households with electrical appliances rose significantly. Refrigerator and vacuum cleaner have the highest persentages. While washing machines were also in high demand in 1920 and it kept on increasing at a considerable rate. On the other hand, number of hours of housework (per week) showed a decline dip between 1920 to 2019.

In 1920, washing machines were in great demand as 40% washing machines were in use in that time. Vacuum cleaners ranked on second as the percetange of vacuum cleaner in 1920 was 30%, it kept on increasing and reached to 100% in 2019. Refrigerators started from 0% and its proportion rose dramatically that reached to 100%.

On the other hand, 50 hours were spent while doing household works, but because of the use of electrical appliances, these number of hours dropped significatly and only 10 hours were spent on household chores in 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the overall rise in appliance ownership and the fall in housework time, and you include relevant comparisons such as washing machines at 40% and vacuum cleaners at 30% in 1920. The response also covers both charts. However, some key details are incomplete or inaccurate: refrigerators began at about 2%, not 0%, and the account omits the washing-machine dip around 1980 and the point at which refrigerators reached full ownership. The overview’s claim that refrigerators and vacuum cleaners had the highest percentages is too broad across the whole period, and “washing machines…kept on increasing” overlooks their temporary decline. More precise reporting of the main stages and a clearer comparison of the series would make the summary more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate discussion of appliance ownership and housework hours. This gives the reader a coherent overall route through the information. Linking phrases such as “Overall” and “On the other hand” help signal shifts, although the latter is used where the relationship is not always a contrast, and the overview’s “While” construction is left without a balanced clause. The appliance details are grouped together, but the sequence is not consistently organised by year or by trend, and several figures are asserted without showing how they compare. Grouping the appliance trends more systematically and using clearer references between sentences would improve progression and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “ranked,” “rose dramatically,” and “decline,” and the meaning is generally understandable. However, the range is uneven, with repeated general wording such as “percentage” and “increasing,” and several collocations are unnatural: “in great demand” and “were in use” do not precisely describe the share of households owning an appliance. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “perecentage,” “persentages,” “percetange,” and “significat[ly].” Aim for accurate chart language such as “the proportion of households owning…” and “reached 100%,” while checking spelling and avoiding phrases that imply demand rather than ownership.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including the overview’s contrast and the sentence beginning “but because of the use of electrical appliances.” The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “Refrigerator and vacuum cleaner have” needs plural agreement, while “the number of hours…showed a decline dip” has an awkward noun construction. In “these number of hours,” the demonstrative and noun do not agree, and “reached to 100%” uses an unnecessary preposition. The opening sentence is also overloaded, making its structure difficult to follow. Use shorter, controlled sentences and check agreement, articles, and verb patterns when describing changes over time.

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