Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The first line chart shows comparison of different electronic machines bought by people, and second table provides data of hours spent to do house work, between 1920 and 2019.

Overall, vacuum cleaner and refrigerator both had gradual increase over the period, while washing machine had slight decrease before considerable rise at the end, and hours were declined over the period, as the next year comes.

Regarding the first chart, refrigerator started at zero, and came upto 90% with gradual increase. Between 1980 and 2019, its growth was stopped at the top (100%). While vacuum cleaner started around 30% in 1920, and showed similar slow growth as fridge, during 30 years of time the numbers were shown at 90% before it increased to 100% in 2000, and remained the same in 2019. However, washing machine had many fluctuation over the period. It was started with around 40%, and grew up to 60% in 1940. Between 1960 and 2000, the numbers were remained between 60 to 70. In 2019, washing machine percentages were just above 70%.

Regarding the hours, hours got reduced over the years, eventually it had 50 hours per week, and it fell down to only 10 in 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and give a relevant overview: appliance ownership generally rises, while weekly housework falls. You also identify important endpoints, including refrigerators reaching 100% and housework dropping from 50 to about 10 hours. This meets the task well, though some details are imprecise or underdeveloped. The refrigerator began at about 2%, not zero, and its rise was not gradual throughout: it climbed sharply to around 55% by 1940. The vacuum cleaner reached about 90% in 1980, rather than after “30 years” of growth. Washing-machine ownership fluctuated only slightly, so “many fluctuation” overstates the pattern. To strengthen the report, compare key stages more precisely and describe the housework decline across intermediate years, not just its endpoints.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the appliance data and housework hours. This makes the main categories easy to follow, and phrases such as “Regarding the first chart” signal the shift between topics. The progression within the appliance paragraph is generally logical, moving from refrigerators to vacuum cleaners and then washing machines. However, some linking is mechanical or unclear: “as the next year comes” does not express the trend naturally, and the sentence beginning “While vacuum cleaner…” is a fragment. The final paragraph is very brief and does not connect the intermediate figures to the overall decline. Use more precise transitions and develop each paragraph around clear comparisons rather than a sequence of isolated descriptions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the main trends, including “gradual increase,” “fluctuation,” “remained,” and “reduced.” However, several word choices and collocations are noticeably inaccurate or informal, which limits precision. “Electronic machines bought by people” is less suitable than language describing household ownership, and “growth was stopped at the top” is an awkward way to describe a plateau. Expressions such as “came upto,” “grew up to,” and “fell down” are also imprecise in this context. There is some repetition of “numbers” and “hours,” and “table” misidentifies the second visual as a chart. Aim for concise, conventional reporting language and use verbs such as “rose,” “levelled off,” and “declined” accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “while” and “before,” but control is inconsistent. Errors include “shows comparison” (missing an article), “hours were declined” (incorrect passive construction), and “the numbers were remained” (an incorrect verb form). The sentence “While vacuum cleaner started…” is incomplete, and “Between 1960 and 2000, the numbers were remained between 60 to 70” combines several grammatical problems. Articles and plural forms are also inconsistent, as in “vacuum cleaner” and “many fluctuation.” These errors sometimes make relationships between figures harder to follow. Practise accurate past-tense trend sentences and complete clause structures, while checking articles, verb forms, and prepositions during editing.

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