Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.0)

this chart represents the changes in ownership of electrical appliances for the year [redacted phone] and also the amount of time they spent doing housework per week for the particular year.so initialy in 1920, there was zero to no purchases of electrical appliances in that year. similarly , Housework hours was obsered to be more beacue of no electric appliances . In the consecutive year 1940, 50-60% households began buying electrical appliances where washing machine was highest owned, 55% owned refrigerator, 50% owned vaccum cleaner and a bit drop was seen in hours of housework at 35%, In the next year 1960, percentage of households having vaccum cleaner and washing machine were the same at 70% however rise was observed in demand of refrigerator at 90% and no. of hours of housework reduced as usual and in the year 1980 it was observed washing machine remained a bit consistent bought appliance while the demand of vaccum cleaner increased , same goes for washing machine 100% of households had refrigerators,household work per week decreased and remaind same for the next 2 decades at 15% approx. therefore in year 2000,2019 the percentage of households washing machine increased a bit to 70-75% while, the refrigerator and vaccum cleaner remained at the top which from point of view people considered having the most neccesity with at 100% and hours of work which was already less dropped to 10 hours per week. this concludes at rise of ownership in electrical appliances declined the hours of househod work as people could most of the work on their own .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad relationship shown: appliance ownership generally rose while housework time fell, and you include several relevant figures, such as refrigerators reaching 100% by 1980 and housework dropping to about 15 hours. However, the response only partly summarises the main features. There is no clearly separated overview, and the opening claim that there were “zero to no purchases” in 1920 is inaccurate: washing machines were at 40%, vacuum cleaners at 30%, and refrigerators at about 2%. Some later details are also confused—for example, the 100% figure in 1980 applies to refrigerators, not washing machines. Focus on accurate comparisons and state the overall trends clearly before selecting key data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response follows the years in chronological order, which gives the reader a basic route through the information, and words such as “similarly,” “however” and “therefore” attempt to connect ideas. Nevertheless, the progression is difficult to follow because most of the report is one long, loosely connected paragraph, with several years and appliance trends crowded into individual sentences. Some links are unclear, as in “same goes for washing machine 100% of households had refrigerators,” where the relationship between the two claims is hard to interpret. Organise the report into a short introduction, an overview, and one or two detail paragraphs. Use linking expressions to show comparisons and changes, rather than relying mainly on chronological transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “percentage,” “demand,” “remained” and “reduced,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several choices are imprecise or repetitive. “Purchases” and “buying” describe consumer actions, whereas the chart reports household ownership; “demand” is not directly measured. Phrases such as “the most necessity” and “could most of the work on their own” are awkward and make the intended meaning less clear. Spelling errors, including “vaccum,” “neccesity” and “househod,” also reduce accuracy. Build a set of precise trend and comparison phrases, and check spelling and collocations before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine several ideas using clauses and time expressions, but sentence control is inconsistent. Many sentences run on, particularly the sentence beginning “in the year 1980,” which joins several claims without clear punctuation or grammatical boundaries. There are also recurring problems with articles, agreement and verb forms: “percentage … were the same” should use a singular verb, while “hours of housework reduced” needs a more complete construction such as “the number of hours … fell.” Capitalisation and spacing around punctuation are also inconsistent. Use shorter, complete sentences to report each comparison, then practise combining them with accurate subordinate clauses. This will make the information easier to understand.

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