Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This chart shows the changes in ownerships of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing in households in a country between 1920 and 2019.

In 1920 the percentage of households was 40 to spent time on wasing machine and in 1940 it is increased to 60% and in 1960 it is further increased to 70% and in 1980 it is decrease to 65% in 2000 it is increased to 70% and in 2019 it is 75%.

The percentage of households of vacuum cleaner in 1920 was 30%, in 1940 it increased to 60%, in 1960 it is increased to 70%, in 1980 it is increased to 90%, in 2000 it is increased to maximum range (100%) and in 2019 it is remaind maximum (100%). So from 1920 t0 2019 it is increased by 70%.

The percentage of households of refrigerator 1920 was 0% while in the coming years it is increased to the maximum range. In 2019 it's range is increased to 100%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the topic and reports several appliance trends, including the washing-machine rise from 40% to 75% and the vacuum-cleaner increase to 100%. However, it does not provide a clear overview of the main features, especially the broad contrast between appliance ownership rising and housework hours falling. The second chart is omitted entirely, and the refrigerator account is incomplete: it gives 0% in 1920, whereas the chart shows about 2%, and says ownership reached the maximum without reporting the intermediate figures or when it did so. The vacuum-cleaner figure for 1940 is also given as 60%, rather than 50%. Select the key trends accurately and summarise both charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has some basic organisation: it introduces the charts and then gives separate paragraphs for washing machines, vacuum cleaners and refrigerators. This helps the reader identify which appliance is being discussed. However, there is no concluding overview, and the account stops before addressing the housework-hours graph, so the progression through the task is incomplete. Linking is also repetitive and mechanical, particularly the repeated sequence of “in 1940,” “in 1960” and “in 1980,” joined mainly by “and.” Use a clear overview followed by grouped comparisons, and vary transitions such as “by contrast,” “meanwhile” and “thereafter” to make relationships between trends clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “percentage of households,” “increased,” “decreased” and “maximum,” so the general subject is usually understandable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and some word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “ownerships,” “spent time on washing machine” and “maximum range.” Spelling errors, including “wasing” and “remaind,” also reduce accuracy. Use precise chart language such as “the proportion of households owning…,” “rose,” “fell slightly,” and “levelled off.” Take care to distinguish ownership from time spent on housework, and use appliance names consistently. A broader, more accurate range would make the comparisons clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to describe changes over time, but most sentences rely on a simple repeated pattern and do not show much variety in sentence structure. Verb forms and tense are often inaccurate or inconsistent: for example, “in 1940 it is increased” and “in 1980 it is decrease” should use past-tense forms such as “increased” and “decreased.” There are also problems with sentence construction in “the percentage of households was 40 to spent time on…,” which makes the relationship between the figure and the appliance unclear. Improve control of past-tense reporting and build complete sentences around each comparison. More accurate clauses and punctuation would make the data easier to follow.

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