Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graphs illustrate the different owners of electrical appliances and total time spent doing housechores in households in one nation between 1920 and 2019.

Overall, in initial stage there was no one who ownes refrigerator. Whereas some residents already started using washing machine and vaccum cleaner. Meanwhile, number of hours of housework per week was high but afterwards it dropped dramatically.

In 1920, no one was using refrigerator. On the other hand alomost 30% of households were using vaccum cleaner, followed by 40% for washing machine. Moreover, in 1940 the usage of refrigerator increased drasically as it crossed vacuum cleaner and sat just below washing machine as they accounted for approx 52% for refrigerator and 50% and 60% for vaccum cleaner and washing machine respectively. Furthermore, refrigerator usage followed the same trend and reached 100% by 1980. Vacuum cleaner also showed static rose and touched 100% by 2000. Lastly, washing machine usage dropped dramatically before reaching aroung 72% in 2019.

On the other hand, the number of hours of housework per week was at its pick in 1920 as it was 50%. Thenafter it dropped significantly till 2019 and concluded at 10%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the broad patterns: refrigerator and vacuum-cleaner ownership rose, while weekly housework time fell. You also include several relevant figures, such as washing machines at 40% in 1920 and refrigerators reaching 100% by 1980. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: refrigerator ownership was about 2%, not zero, in 1920; in 1940 the figures were approximately 55% for refrigerators and 50% for vacuum cleaners; and washing-machine ownership dipped around 1980 before rising again, rather than simply dropping before 2019. The overview also misses the important endpoint that refrigerators and vacuum cleaners both reached 100%. The housework figure is hours, not a percentage. More precise reporting and a fuller overview would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and paragraphs reporting appliance ownership and housework time. Sequencing by year helps the reader follow the data, and linking expressions such as “Moreover” and “Furthermore” show an attempt to connect points. However, some transitions are mechanical or confusing: “On the other hand” suggests a contrast that is not clearly established, while “Whereas” begins a fragment after the overview’s first sentence. The appliance paragraph also moves through several series in long sentences, making comparisons harder to track. Grouping the main trends first and using clearer references—for example, distinguishing the three appliances consistently—would improve progression and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “usage,” “reached,” “dropped,” and “accounted for,” so the main trends are generally understandable. There are, however, several spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural choices, including “housechores,” “vaccum,” “drasically,” “static rose,” and “pick.” “Different owners” is also not an accurate way to describe the proportion of households owning appliances. Some expressions, such as “no one who ownes refrigerator,” are awkward and reduce precision. Aim for standard chart language such as “ownership,” “the proportion of households,” “peaked,” and “rose steadily,” and check spelling carefully. This would make your descriptions more natural and exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including comparisons and clauses introduced by “as” and “whereas.” Most of the intended meaning can be understood, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “there was no one who ownes refrigerator” has an incorrect verb form and article, and “Whereas some residents already started using…” is a dependent clause presented as a sentence. In “the number of hours … was at its pick … as it was 50%,” the construction does not clearly express the measurement, and the figure should be stated in hours. Review subject–verb agreement, articles, and complete sentence structure, and use past-tense forms consistently when describing the historical data. Greater control would make the comparisons clearer.

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