Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 5.5)

the statstical information in context with the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019 is depicted by line graph

At a fleeting glance , it can be clearly seen that the most eye catching feature is that the refrigerator started from 0 percentage of household in 1920 but it was increased year by year till 100 percentage in 2000 . moreover , in 1930 , washing machine starts from 40 percentage of households but it can be noticed in 1960 washing machines was decreased then in 1980 it was increased till 2019 . however , vacuum cleaner starts from 30 percentage of households in 1920 it was increased year by year until 2019

Moving ahead , it can be analysed that, number of hours per week starts from 50 in 1920 but it can be noticed that it was down year by year until 2019

overall , it can be inferred that the maximum percentage of refrigerator but minimum percentage of washing machine

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad trends: refrigerator and vacuum-cleaner ownership rose, while weekly housework hours fell. However, the response only partially reports the chart’s key information, and the overview is unclear. The refrigerator began at about 2%, not 0%, and reached 100% by 1980, rather than 2000. Washing-machine ownership did not start in 1930; it rose from 40% in 1920 to 70% in 1960, dipped slightly in 1980, then increased. The claim that washing machines had the minimum percentage overall is not supported, since refrigerators began much lower. Include a clearer overview comparing the appliance trends with the decline in housework, and select accurate figures to support it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from appliance ownership to housework hours and then an overall statement. This gives the reader some organisation, and linking expressions such as “moreover” and “Moving ahead” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, progression within the appliance paragraph is difficult to follow, and the final overview does not clearly summarise the main trends. Several connectors are used mechanically or do not express a clear relationship, while repeated “it can be noticed” phrasing makes the account less direct. Group the appliance comparisons in a logical order, then describe housework hours, and finish with a concise overview that accurately brings the main patterns together.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of descriptive language, including “depicted,” “eye catching feature,” and “inferred,” and the reader can generally understand the topic. However, vocabulary is often imprecise or unnatural for describing data. Phrases such as “started from 0 percentage of household,” “it was down year by year,” and “maximum percentage of refrigerator” do not express the intended comparisons clearly. There are also spelling and form errors, including “statstical,” and repeated use of “increased” limits variety. Use standard chart language such as “stood at,” “rose to,” “declined,” and “reached a plateau,” while checking spelling and choosing accurate nouns such as “ownership” or “proportion of households.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas in longer sentences, but control is inconsistent, and errors frequently affect clarity. For example, “the refrigerator started from 0 percentage … but it was increased” has problems with article use, phrasing, and verb form; “washing machines was decreased” also has subject–verb disagreement and an unsuitable passive construction. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are unreliable, with spaces before commas and several long sentences joined without clear control. The response relies heavily on simple past statements and repeated “it can be” patterns, so the range is limited. Practise accurate comparisons using structures such as “ownership rose from … to …,” and check agreement, tense, articles, and punctuation in each sentence.

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