Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Given diagrams display variation in posession of household electrical equiments and the time spent in hours using those for housework in a country between the period of 1920 to 2019.

First chart shows that at the start in 1920 washing machine was most used appliance at around 40% above both Vaccum cleaner which was available at 30% overall and Refrigerator which had no presence at that time but until 1940 it become the second most used household appliance but in 1960 Refrigerator was most available equal to Vaccum cleaner at 90% with Washing machine at 70%, Further more after next two decades in 1980 Refrigerator has been available in 100% households following this Vaccum cleaner also steadily increased to 100% ratio in the year 2000 but Washing machine remained below 80% until 2019 while other two are still widely accessible every where at same 100% ratio, Even though these electricl equiments have seen upward trend in their percentage of availability but on the other hand their usage in number of hours per week in house has significantly decreased from 50% percent to just around 10% until 2019.

In conclusion, it is clear that ratio in number of electrical equiments along with households overall have increased but their usage in housekeeping has declined gradually over the period of 1920 to 2019.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response identifies the main overall contrast: appliance ownership generally rose, while weekly housework hours fell. It also reports several relevant figures, including washing machines at about 40% initially and refrigerators reaching 100% by 1980. However, some data are misreported: refrigerators were already present in about 2% of homes in 1920, not absent, and reached about 90% in 1960 rather than being equal to vacuum cleaners at 90% (vacuum cleaners were about 70%). The housework figure is expressed as a percentage, although it is measured in hours, and the final summary says appliance ownership increased overall without noting the washing-machine dip and slower growth. A more accurate overview and clearer reporting of the housework series would strengthen coverage.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: it introduces the charts, describes appliance ownership, and ends with a summary of the broad trends. The sequence through the years is generally understandable, and phrases such as “on the other hand” signal contrast. However, most of the appliance data is packed into one very long sentence, with several ideas joined by “but,” “while,” and “further more.” This makes comparisons harder to follow and causes some unclear references, such as “these electricl equiments” and “their usage.” Separate the appliance trends from the housework figures into distinct paragraphs, and use shorter sentences to make each comparison clear. The conclusion also repeats the overview rather than adding a precise synthesis.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

There is enough vocabulary to describe trends and comparisons, including “upward trend,” “steadily increased,” “remained below,” and “declined gradually.” These choices communicate the main patterns, but several word-choice and spelling problems reduce precision. “Possession” and “availability” are not the most natural terms for the proportion of households owning appliances; “ownership” or “households with” would be clearer. “Usage in number of hours” is awkward, and “available every where” is imprecise. Spelling errors such as “posession,” “equiments,” “Vaccum,” and “electricl” are noticeable. Aim for accurate chart vocabulary and check spelling, while avoiding inflated phrases such as “widely accessible” when the data simply shows household ownership.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response attempts both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses with “while” and “even though,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, some sentences are overloaded and contain errors in sentence boundaries, articles, agreement, and verb forms. For example, “First chart shows” needs an article, and “it become the second most used” has an incorrect verb form. The long sentence beginning “First chart shows” joins several complete ideas with commas, while “in 1980 Refrigerator has been available” uses an unsuitable tense for a completed historical period. The final sentence also has an unclear grammatical relationship between “ratio” and “households.” Use past simple consistently for the historical data, check articles and agreement, and divide long sentences into shorter, controlled comparisons.

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