Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates the proportion oh households with electrical appliances and number of hours spent per household, per week in one country, during the period 1920 to 2019.

Overall, it is evident that the data is given for three electrical appliances such as washing machine, refrigerator and vaccum cleaner, which helped in reduction of amount of time spent doing housework in households. The percentage of households using vacuum and refrigerator increases over the time and end at same level, while the proportion of washing machine users were low at the end.

To begin with, in 1920, refrigerator started with its lowest point, they then increased dramatically just over 90% in 1960, after which they levelled-off. In 1920, vacuum cleaner started with 30% and grew steadily throughout the year and end at nearly 100% in 2019, by surpassing washing machine in 1960. While, the percentage of washing machine declined after 1960 at approaximately 62%, after which they slightly inclined to reach roughly 71% in 2019.

Moving further, between the 1920 and 2019, the number of hours per week, per household showed consistent downward trend, starting from approximately 50 hours per week and ending at 10 hours per week.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the overall relationship between rising appliance ownership and falling housework hours, and you report several relevant figures, including vacuum cleaners at 30% initially and about 100% by 2019. However, some key details are inaccurate or unclear: refrigerators reach about 90% in 1960, not “just over 90%,” and washing-machine ownership rises from about 65% in 1980 to 75% in 2019 rather than ending at roughly 71%. The overview also says vacuum and refrigerator ownership end at the same level, but does not clearly state that both reach 100%. The housework trend is accurately summarised, though the appliance comparisons are more fully covered than the changes in hours. More precise reporting and a clearer overview would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, two detail paragraphs, and a logical movement from appliance ownership to housework hours. Linking phrases such as “Overall,” “To begin with,” and “Moving further” help signal progression, and the reader can follow the main trends. Some connections are less smooth, however. The sentence beginning “In 1920, vacuum cleaner…” shifts abruptly into “While” before the washing-machine comparison, leaving the relationship between the clauses awkward. References such as “they” after “refrigerator” are also not always clear. To move beyond this level, use cohesive devices more naturally and make comparisons within paragraphs more explicitly connected.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “increased dramatically,” “levelled-off,” “declined,” and “downward trend.” These choices help describe changes and comparisons, although some wording is imprecise or unnatural: “using vacuum and refrigerator” is not the same as household ownership, and “started with its lowest point” is an awkward way to describe the initial figure. There are also spelling errors in “vaccum” and “approaximately,” alongside the typo “oh.” Aim for accurate appliance terms and natural collocations, and check spelling carefully. More precise language for rises, falls, and stable periods would make the account clearer and more flexible.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “after which” and “while,” and the main trends remain understandable. Some grammatical errors recur, particularly in agreement and sentence construction. For example, “the proportion … users were low” mismatches a singular subject and verb, while “refrigerator started … they then increased” shifts from singular to plural reference. The clause “While, the percentage…” is not correctly joined to the preceding sentence, and “between the 1920 and 2019” has an unnecessary article. These errors do not generally prevent understanding, but they reduce accuracy. Practise checking subject–verb agreement, pronoun reference, and how dependent clauses are attached to complete sentences.

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