Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line charts illusrates the percentage of households the ownership of three electriacal appliances washing machine,refrigerator,vacuum cleaner in one country between 1920 to 2019.

Overall,the three appliances incresed by the particlure in period time.refrigerator and vacuum cleaner almoust the year by year incresed while the washing machine was grow and some downs follow up.

In 1920 approximatry 40% of the households purchece the washing machine.vacuum cleaner was 30% of the households purchad and the refrigerator was the 0% of the household.in 1940 all are grow and the around 50% of the vacuum cleaner,55% of refrigerator and 60% of the washing machine.

In 1960 the refrigerator was the fastly grow up to 90% and the washing machine and vachuum cleaner was the same position 70%. the washing machine and vacuum cleaner was the 1980 to 2019 was countinusaly grow up the 100% and in 1980 down to the 65% and the after two year samll grow.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the subject and give a broad overview that appliance ownership generally rose, with refrigerators and vacuum cleaners increasing and washing-machine ownership fluctuating. However, the response reports only part of the task: it omits the housework-hours chart entirely, so a major feature and comparison are missing. Some details are also inaccurate or unclear. For example, the refrigerator was about 2% in 1920, not 0%, and the vacuum cleaner reached 100% by 2000, while the washing machine did not reach 100%. The final sentence is difficult to interpret and does not clearly report the later figures. To improve, summarise both charts, select the main trends, and give accurate comparisons across the period.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation: an introduction is followed by an overview and then chronological details, with years helping the reader follow the timeline. However, progression is not consistently clear, particularly in the final sentence, where the sequence of changes from 1980 to 2019 is difficult to understand. Linking is limited and sometimes awkward, as in “In 1960” and “and the after two year.” The response also groups information by year without clearly comparing the appliance trends or separating the two charts’ information. Use clear paragraphs for the overview and key details, and connect comparisons explicitly—for example, explain that refrigerators reached full ownership before vacuum cleaners, while housework hours declined.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “percentage,” “households,” “ownership,” and the names of the appliances. However, the range is limited, and frequent spelling and word-choice errors make several phrases difficult to understand, such as “particlure in period time,” “purchece,” and “fastly grow up.” Some expressions are also unsuitable for describing data, including “purchad” and “same position.” Use precise trend language such as “rose,” “fell,” “remained stable,” and “reached 100%,” and check spelling carefully. A wider set of accurate terms would help you describe both the appliance figures and the decline in housework time more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few longer sentences and use time references to describe changes, but sentence structures are limited and errors occur frequently. For example, “The line charts illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “the washing machine and vacuum cleaner was the same position” has incorrect agreement and an incomplete comparison structure. Articles and sentence construction are also problematic in phrases such as “the refrigerator was the 0% of the household.” Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and full stops. These errors sometimes make the intended meaning hard to follow. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using clauses such as “while” and “whereas,” checking agreement and verb forms.

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